Twirling like a ballerina
But falling from the sky.
My descent is so familiar.
I already feel the crash.
Why don't you reach up
To catch me in your arms?
Be my hero this once.
Save me from the end.
Listen for my slowing heart
Through the silent darkness.
Pretend your love is enough.
Show me that it's enough.
A contest entry
- Make me feel (pre-writes allowed) by Shacadia Shay.
410 points, ended September 10, 2008, 45 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
If you read this, please comment. Be honest, I can handle it.
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If we ask for a hero it defeats the purpose, bu ti f we don't htey never come. Dumbass boys. >P I love this poem. It flows beautifuly and the wording is perfect. And yes tthey do make a pill for that, but the person is way better.
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What an interesting title! I also like the first stanza about the ballerina. It brings to mind someone graceful and beautiful whose feathery personality is really not that at all because of her want for love.
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i like it a lot. the ballerina role.
Twirling like a ballerina
But falling from the sky.
My descent is so familiar.
I already feel the crash.
great job!
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lol i'm real stoned and i like it with the title.....title is my favorite part of this lil jam. good twist d00d.
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i really like this.
and it speaks to me.
i can see it happening before my eyes...
"Why don't you reach up
To catch me in your arms?"
i love that! -
really good
I love poems about falling
it's such a thrill
And I like this one
short but really good
nice write
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Oh, I know that feeling. Falling and not knowing whether you'll land fully intacted. We all want a hero but you have to ask for one these days. They don't just come out of the woods anymore.
The first four lines I love; they'll stick with me for some time.
I hope your hero comes.
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Twirling like a ballerina
But falling from the sky.
My decent is so familiar.
I already feel the crash.
that stanza was my favourite,
but 'decent' should be 'descent'
lol it threw me off.
other than that, this piece is beautiful.
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Beautiful...btdt
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