I walked that road, past the emerald trees,
Down the garden where streams of silver flow,
I met those tiny folks dancing with ease
Elves and sprites, pixies in blue, made their bow;
I crossed the path where fine raspberries grow,
Pots of gold, I saw at the rainbow's end
In that enchanting lane, there was a bend.
Farther I went, farther and farther down,
With unicorns to lead, I hopped that way,
I felt like a princess with my own crown,
Paused by the hobs who made me a bouquet
Chanced on a fairy, who promised to stay,
I saw the waters 'neath the moonlight's gleam
'twas, but a page I stole, from my own dream....
In a list
A contest entry
- Poetic Form: Rhyme Royal - Prompt - Dreams by Little Eagle.
700 points, ended August 23, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Nice job. You were very descriptive. It allowed the reader to visualize everything. Beautiful job.
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A beautiful poem. Great Imagery and flow. Loved it.
Keep writing
Pam
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Very well written. You imagery brought out your fantasy charaxters. You told a beautiful story. Thank you for sharing.
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A very beautiful and touching poem that everyone can relate t
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A very charming poem and worthy of a read. Your imagery is amazing. beautifully written! Thank you for sharing. Yours in poetry,
gypsy
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A very charming poem and worthy of a read. Happy trails
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I thimk its pretty good!
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Wonderful
An amazing poem, I wish I was as good as you.
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what a dream!
your imagery is amazing, you always seem to please the imagination
beautifully written
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Thank you for your entry
Now this is my kind of dream and I absolutely love your last line.
The form was done well, though you were short one syllable in the first line of the first stanza and had one extra syllable in the third from the last line in the second stanza. The rhyme was well developed and you did well in keeping to the rhyme scheme.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy -
A beautifully crafted Rhyme Royal. I really enjoyed reading this. It has been a long time since I have tried any real poetry forms...I think I miss it. I wish you the best in the contest.
Sam
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wow...this is such an enchanting piece...full of beautiful imageries...if this is just a piece of a dream...surely the whole dream is a magical event...good luck dear poet!
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This is so beautiful and filled
with a lot of lovely imagery.
Lovely and enchanting work here.
I love the last line in this!
Good luck to you!
Jeremy0826
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