waves..
slapping, loving, thrashing
the rugged rocks..
rocks..
polluting, resisting, blocking
the lapping waves..
(their wants and needs unquestioned)
law of nature.
growth?
life?
something's just happened..
(what?)
do you know?
do I know?
(am I supposed to??)
What about people?
Are we different?
law of nature.
growth..
life.
If we are not,
then what about spaces?
Of one
and the other
binding a relationship
to one another?
violated?
Author notes
random..
(Thank you dear wattle for the title 
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Oh how I like these questioning here....as far as I think about it:.. in a strange kind of way people are all different and a bit the same in a way...Only the reacting and responding in all kind of situations is so much different....
Must be what life throws at your feet....or doesn't throw at your feet....
Did you grew up in storm or whas it summer all of your life...well just some thoughts coming out of your wording
That's why I like questions...you can go anywhere with them
XXJeannette
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wow, haven't quite read anything like this before (which I see as a compliment, new is good, originality is hard to find) The constant questionsing nature of this piece (pun not intended) is great and the confusion in the middle is suprising and interesting.
Immediately upon reading the first three stanzas I was reminded of how people often interact in relationships, which you then bring up later in the poem to my pleasure. And the last line puts a new slant on things all together. As a poem it seems to go from floating ethereal interactions to agressive intrusive questioning which I though was fantastic!
Great write, thanks for the read.
Glitch
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the polluting and lapping part is superb! and the rest you have played so beautifully with punctuation. it is indeed very advanced . great!
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You my dear Kunjal, are so good expressing deep thoughts.
I don't know if we know, but we keep on trying to find out, don't we?
I just enjoy so much your lines
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Ms Me, you’re in an inquiring frame of mind this summer. It’s interesting how people are the same, and different. Mostly it’s refreshing although occasionally this can be quite frightening even terrifying.
.I’m curious; did you write this at the sea shore or did the metaphor come to you at the computer? --- I often wonder about this topic. A lot of people would try to tell us we are different because we come from such different locations, I’m not so sure about that. Although I’ve noticed many, many people at this location are very different. ---- I like your poetry and thought processes. (Thank you)
A title; my choice ‘Splinters’
This movie is for you to watch. ---- http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0289328/ (make sure it’s the one with Robson Green in it (there is another movie using the same name (which isn’t the same at all)))
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At the computer
..the thought prompt was actually as you put it- a questioning mood prompt.. it all started with some real forceful advice coming from a loved one when it was not asked for in the first place..
I'll chk that film.. Nitin Ganatra - the Indian guy in it is in my friend's family!.. will definitely try to catch it..
And Thank you for the title one more time
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The loving and the thrashing,
the resisting and the blocking
appear, as I see them in your words,
beyind the waves and rocks
as human forms, interacting.
Strong emotion speaking out in these words.
Quite explosive, Fathom!!!!!!
M-C
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