Standing alone by the open window..
The light breeze swaying her soft almond colored hair..
Deep in thought..
Trying desperately to escape the shouts and cries of the voices haunting her..
If only she could run away from the troubles and miseries in her life..
And arrive in the fantasy world she had always imagined in her minds eye..
But fleeing away would be a coward act..
And where would she go anyways..
She saw a no better life in running away from the ones she loved..
From those so busy to recognize this truth..
Busy sorting out their own lives..
But she wished if only she could make all those who belonged to her ‘actually hers’
But she lacked the determination to bury the long sought hatchet..
The hallow truths of her life lingered her as far as she could remember..
She closed her eyes and silently pleaded God for help..
Suddenly an unknown feeling of defeat to move on struck her..
An inner voice called her to surrender herself to the hands of fate..
But the next moment a spirit of comeback kindled inside her..
Life had not ended..
Beautiful, cheerful substances of life still awaited her somewhere..
Nature, friends, achievements, festivals, true love..
And things she did not know but would discover..
Only if she parted with her sorrows and vowed to see the bright side of life..
With this renewed feeling of willingness and eagerness..
She promised to move forward and bury her past behind her..
Author notes
this is my first poem..just rote watever came to my mind..i hope to get some response on this.
A contest entry
- Write What You Will! by limechic.
725 points, ended September 1, 2008, 62 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Upset or Embarrassed? by Poetess12.
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i really love this piece and it says so much
a really great job! awesome!
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This is a good poem. It held my attention. The imagery is great. I was able to picture it in my mind.
"Standing alone by the open window..
The light breeze swaying her soft almond colored hair..
Deep in thought.."
Thank you for your entry
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You have improved alot, remarkable, nice words, beautiful theme and idea.
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you have defined life pretty well.
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The poet of hearts and beautiful words
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I like this...could you add in your AN how this experience changed your life please? that is one of my rules and id hate to DQ this piece. thanks!
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WOW! This is great! Gave me goosebumps! All good ones do, right? I love the process you describe in this! The only way of enlightenment! Bravo, poet!!!!
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I can understand the need for flight...I've given into that need before and ended up right back where I started! I enjoyed reading this, you did a good job!!
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Hey this is such a nice poem!
I think you did really well for your first poem- and that's what poetry is all about anyway- writing down whatever that comes to mind 
All the best!
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I can relate with the girl in this poem...it's hard to think positively sometimes - but you never know what the future will bring!
Great write, good luck in the contest!
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Woh! this is brilliant...there really isn't anything i can say that will do it justice....profoundly radiant...thank you so much for creating and sharing such a spirited poem...all the best...
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thanx..u really raised my spirits.
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I like it, it's hopeful, I find it has a happy ending, it also shows an inner struggle, how hard life can be sometimes when coming to a deadending, but how, in the meantime, it promises renewal and hope when leaving your past behind. That's why I like it!
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thanx for appreciating it.
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And I am still waiting for those "beautiful, cheerful substances of life..." to show up. I have been optimistic until the sun decided not to shine anymore in my brightly lit world. Then it all went dark, and I was sad, melancholy, defeated, run over. I have tried for 47 years to find those "beautiful, cheeful substances of life..." but they don't seem to want to find me.
You wrote this poem from deep in the depths of your soul, and I can feel the emotions it took to write this, because I have those same emotions. Years of saying, "hey, over here. Here I am, remember me," have made me more cynical through the years. I still have an open heart, and an open mind, but my thoughts are very cynical when it comes to taking a person's word over something I know can't be undone. Fate is a harsh mistress, and she will keep you under her feet as long as she can, until someone comes along, or something happens to break that bond.
Thank you for sharing.
Hugs,
Barbara
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i read ur profile. i see you have had a sad life..all that uve ritten abt wat happened to you especially at Sparts is too depressing.. but i guess it is people like you with whose life stories people like us gain courage and inspiration..i wish ur remaining life is filled with all teh joy taht seemed to have been sucked out of it since tyme unmemorable.
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i like this poem. great job ^^
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