Internal balance and true being fall upon me,
But then it falls away,
When the light is on, i see
But the dark is always my day.
Got nothing for the insincere
Got nothing for their fear
Of saying what they mean
When anyone is here
When anyone is near
Were you trapped in their games
Did they beg you to play?
I'll bet they promised ribbons and pearls?
I'll bet you never again feel like a little girl.
Has it been so long,
Since you looked at the world?
Has it been so long,
You forgot who you were?
Were you left in the cold?
Did they take your coat of fur?
Do not tell me, you were never told.
I'm not a teller of tales
But i see from here you were sold on sales
I bet the path was narrow and steep
And there was no one to keep, the wind in your sails
I know the stars will save you
Your alive and your true
I know you are you.
Remember the trees, remember what they see
Please say you remember me
Do not tell me you forgot, about playing in the snow
Do not tell me you forgot, where to go.
The winter is getting bitter, the frost is freezing
You stole away my breath, you left me weezing,
I could of kept the air,
If only i had known, you were teasing.
Has it been so long,
Since you looked at the world?
Has it been so long,
You forgot who you were?
Were you left in the cold?
Did they take your coat of fur?
Do not tell me, you were never told.
I know you want to believe
You are never alone
I just want to tell ya', you were always gone
I just want ya to know, you never answered the phone.
When will you see , the depth of the sea?
When will you allow, the strange to be?
When will you set, the truth free?
I am tired of waiting, my soul is sinking low
I can't stick around, I got to go.
If you are looking for your facts,
I'll show you an empty sack
The truth is, it is where it is at,
It is within our being
Open your eyes, you will love seeing
The ocean and the sky, and society's lie.
Do not feel too down, The light will see you around
We are eternally lost, There is no found
Our own confusion, is all that is abound.
Has it been so long,
Since you looked at the world?
Has it been so long,
You forgot who you were?
Were you left in the cold?
Did they take your coat of fur?
Do not tell me, you were never told.
Author notes
5 am when i wrote this freewrite no previous structure to it this is 1st draft so there will probably be grammar errors... sorry
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I'm sorry it took me so long to comment on this... I admit I forgot. But now I remembered.
One of my favorite parts of your writing is your philosophical questioning intertwined with your poetry, such as in "Has it been so long, since you looked at the world?" and that entire stanza.
There are a few grammar errors... if you want me to point them out let me know. But they don't distract from the meaning.
I love that part near the ending about how the truth is within our being. Beautifully philosophical, once again.
Overall... nicely written. I think you could eliminate some words to help with the meter for the rhyme but you did great
-cassidy


