Poetry ...
emotive expression
of a soul left naked,
before temptation's altar
Author notes
Prompt 4: Poetry.
Chosen Form: Naani,
Naani is one of India's most popular Telugu poems. Naani means an expression of one and all. It consists of 4 lines, the total lines consists of 20 to 25 syllables. The poem is not bound to a particular subject.
Generally it depends upon human relations and current statements. This poetry was introduced by one of the renowned Telugu poets Dr. N.Gopi, presently working as vice-chancellor to Telugu University, Andhra Pradesh.
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A contest entry
- Form Poetry Anyone? by e m i l y.
450 points, ended August 23, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Detailed critique welcome
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"a soul left naked"
Baring one's soul while writing? Well, I guess that owuld make sense.
"temptation's alter"
I think you meant 'altar', as in a platform structure thingy, right?? Not 'alter' like fixing something...
This is a cool phrase, but I'm not sure what temptation has to do with poetry...I mean, I'm not tempted to write poetry. I just like to...LoL...
"Poetry,"<--maybe a dash instead of a comma...doesn't really matter, I just think that would look better.
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Hmm, I like it.. It's expressive yet softly done.. This is a unique form of poetry, one that I believe you did justice to. Good luck in the contest..
Angel
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This is awesome...I love it. You should do more of these....
Beautifully done, Cuz...
Lynda
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