um...
and humming
things too.
it's what you
do when no one
is watching.
brows knitted
to your
forehead, you're
interested in
dessert. but first
you'd like
some more coffee.
and I'd like
the check please,
if I could?
you look good
in your rich-boy
shoes and I
need to be
excused
if it's
alright.
you have bad
manners,
but
the sex is so
ungodly polite.
Author notes
this is probably not what you had in mind. 
A contest entry
- when fire and fingers speak by Virgoan.
1400 points, ended September 6, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Any advice is welcome
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HAHAHA CLASSIC!
Oh my goodness, this is classic. I love the ending, it sounds so posh until the end.
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love the twist and how you made that direct and powerful transition of thoughts. one way or another - we see this often. Lol...wonderful write
Thanks for sharing your gift.
HENSLEY
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Hehehe I love this!
I like the little internal rhyme near the end with "alright" and "polite", it flowed so good. And the endng is just awesome 
Great job! Good luck in the contest 
Jeanette*~
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but
the sex is so
ungodly polite.
HAHAHAHAAAA! Oh god, gurl, you SLAY me! I don't know if this is what the host wanted but dude, this just made my NIGHT! lol
You rawk!
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lol it always fun to write stuff like this.
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oh godddddd. Entitled men. I love this zillion. You're currently blowing me away with your poetry.
"you're
interested in
dessert. but first
you'd like
some more coffee.">>>this is so much more than the food dessert. Oh lord, so brilliant.
. Write more poetry ! .
Meg~
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It definitely is so much more! lol So, so much more.
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but the sex is so ungodly polite... reminds me of the marriage i am trying to repair... GREAT piece and the flow works really well with the back and forth of it...
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niice, i loved the way you ended this and the title is so subtle. well done.
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stellar
Oh man, I loveeee this. I'm so glad Jason told me to come by. I love the flow, and the 'hey waiter, bring me more coffee' almost nonchalant attitude. This is good stuff zillion. . The last two stanza, just zapped my finger tips . Me gusta lo mucho!
-joan.
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guys like that are always so damn nonchalant. Nothing means anything to them.
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Seriously.
.... I've known a lot of them.
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love the title
the whole poem
how it begins um..yummy
and the lines are within my comprehension limit-no more than three words haha
the last stanza is hilarious
poor rich boy lol
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lol I like a little humor every now and then.
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