Your name
my lips set free.
One word
upon a seasoned breeze,
one gentle zephyr’s kiss released
to stir the forest leaves.
My love, how could one whisper
disturb the canopy?
Your eyes I thought
at first to seek,
in caressing ears
would you turn to me?
Five letters upon
breath’s anxious steed,
borne into April…oh April,
the music, are you listening?
Our lives
forever changed,
as summers gained,
still we shared.
When our falls arrived,
they found us prepared.
Our Winters came
and we were always spared.
With our old age it seems,
each spring returned most fair.
As the day we met,
my April most dear.
Your name
became a symphony,
listen...
our children’s children sing.
My love do not fear,
that which the chorus is following.
Soon one of us must surely sleep.
The other, for a time enduring spring's;
…notes upon our seasoned breeze.
Author notes
Married Sept. 11, 1993...For my lovely wife-April... you and me baby, you and me.
A contest entry
- Invite Only! For Those I Consider Some Of The Best Writers On The Site ! by Cupcrazy.
3500 points, ended September 18, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
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Sweet. i love this poem. The feeling of your love is a great one. good job and good luck. thanks for entering
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Great write! Keep it up!
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This is so romantic. A very lovely write indeed! Nicely done! Thanks for entering my contest. Good luck. I'm honored to have you show your work here.
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I really did like this one. Born in april lol.
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A beautiful write. I love the metaphors of the seasons. Very enjoyable. Best wishes to you in the contest.
Sam
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Excellent Who said that men have no ideas when it comes to romantic feelings This one proves them all wrote in a big way
May life continue to bless you both
Good luck in the contest
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thank you for you entree i wish you luck
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I agree with Ithica ... someone is very luck indeed to have such poetry written for her. Some men can't even put two words together and then there are those that excell themselves. Count yourself among the latter.
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Your wife is a lucky gal to have a man who can express his love with such an elegant hand!!! A poem which I'm sure will be cherished for generations. This is a solid foundation, handed down, will make it a force to be reckoned with, and a blessing to behold!!! Beautiful!
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So beautiful. and I'm sure your wife loves this! How lucky she is that you write poetry to her!!
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Beautiful! Im pleased...i really appreciate it! Thanks a lot for offering me this read...Im extremely impressed...Thanks for the entry! Good Luck!!
-Regards,
Mekhala
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this is beautiful. it made me smile as i read it, some of us jaded younger writers (or at least this one!) need to read about real, lasting love on occasion to remind us it's really out there. absolutely lovely, i think i;ll come back to this one when i need a pick-me-up.
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Such beautiful language.
You can really tell you have a deep love, or caring for this person.
Good luck and thanks for entering
Sarah
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This is so beautiful, Michael!
Such a wonderful dedication to your wife...
I love the gorgeous language and the effortless flow of this piece...
From beginning to end, just gorgeous!
Ty for entering!
Lynda
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Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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This is just so beautiful Michael. The emotion is so deep and rich, it flows wonderfully and really lets the reader into your heart and the deep compelling love that you have for your partner. Just beautiful and a wonderful compliment to the Neruda piece. Hugs, Bunny
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to me this speaks
of love in words as best to describe what there are no words deep enough to express , a love and sense of devotion the in silence speaks louder from the heart than can be spoken. wonderful piece you have penned here.
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This is beautiful, so many wonderful interchanges, such deep feeling. Just lovely.
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This is breath taking
So much so that I had to remind myself to breathe while reading it...
What a lucky woman she is
♥Becky♥
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And I'm sure your lovely wife, April loves this poem - and you... it's beautiful to read love like this between a husband and a wife. This line is so beautiful "My love, how could one whisper
disturb the canopy?" - yes, it's possible for one whisper to do that and even disturb the understory of the forest too. Lovely poetry.
~ Nicolette
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Outstanding "Five letters upon breath's anxious steed!" Delightful descriptions of sharing life's seasons together. Lovely "our children's children sing...do not fear that which [in] the chorus is following." Endings are foreseen in beginnings of beautiful undertakings like symphonies, songs, and families. Memories of a lifetime of love can sustain us when we must undergo separation for a season. You certainly must share this with your beloved, if you have not already done so! Sweetly and tenderly written.
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Lovely tone & poetically tuned with an embrace of a relationship bound to survive.....she's a lucky woman....good luck with your entry...God bless you!
Bear ~
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