Wait, turn back this way,
I've got something more today.
Before you go,
I kind of wanted you to know.
I always miss you when you're gone,
And wish you wouldn't be away for long.
I care about, can you not see,
That I wish you could care in the same way for me?
I don't burden you with my stupid complaints,
I try so hard to be your good little saint.
Why don't you care, why don't you try,
You don't even notice the tears that cry.
I know things are hard.
And the last thing I needed to tell you,
Is that I love you so,
But if time has come,
I've said what I've said,
And I'll try to let you go.
A contest entry
- 130 titles by xxRainbowDawnxx.
525 points, ended August 21, 2008, 40 entries
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Please tell me what you think!!!
Comments
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You always need to say these things before it's too late. If it's true, it'll work out.
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I don't like the rhyming, it seems forced & awkward.
however, I do like the emotions behind it,
and I think that makes up for it
good luck -
;o wow, this was great. I cant say more because i am at a loss for words
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