Shadows form like water f.r.e.e.z.i.n.g
...everything stops....
the world's rotation seizing
F
I
R
E
starts like
-a-motor-bike-
.sudden.
&
..loud..
with one single motion
.:.
commotion
.:.
screaming & bleeding
-ZombieS FeedinG-
all peace is leaving
there's nothing to
_believe in_
...all hope is lost...
So, ESCAPE
-at any cost-
run
A
W
A
Y
.it's not okay.
[get it through your head]
Cause Everyone Is Dead
Author notes
this came out of nowhere!
=)
oh & i didnt know it was dirty pretty-ish when i wrote it haha
AP name = I.refuse.to.grow.up
A contest entry
- Another Dirty-Pretty Contest. ♥ by innocence jaded.xx.
475 points, ended September 6, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Walking into the Darkness! by vampireblood.
300 points, ended September 21, 2008, 66 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Oooh, I really liked this ! It was awesome. Really. haha, I loved every word, and how you wrote it, especially. Wonderful write.
I think my favorite part was:
-F
I
R
E
starts like
-a-motor-bike-
.sudden.
&
..loud..
with one single motion
.:.
commotion
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Uniquely and creatively written.
Thanks for entering & good luck in the contest ! ♥ -
the best things in life come out of nowhere Alex.
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haha for coming out of nowhere thats pretty good I absoultly love the ending, its the best in my opinion!!! And i love it because it is so blunt yet is packed with imagery. Thanks for giving me a chance to read this. I adore this poem.
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thank you ever so much
hehe
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wow this is really cool, i love the formatting it adds so much to the poem <3
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haa. i love it.
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very interesting poem, the middle section works extremly wel lthis is a very good peice, well done o nthis write, keep it up
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I love it - usually don't go for dirty pretty but... hello, this is ZOMBIES!
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I actually didn't know what i was doing here was the dirty pretty thing haha. i just found out what that is today. i made my poem like this cuz i thought it looked cool hahaha
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reminds me of E.E. Cummings
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cool
I liked the way you shaped the words I though in a couple of places the rhyme sounded forced but over all it's really good,keep writting.
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haha! this is hardcore...
i picture the most amazing zombie movie ever!!! oh my bob! lol
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haha thanks i love that.. oh my bob... its funny hahha
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