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Drowning Etheree

Breath
Is gone
In bubbles
Floating upwards
Fleeing from the depths
Of a dark, dim abyss.
Light is unavailable
Lost in the unknown recesses
Of murky tidewaters and coral
Jagged reefs cutting the ocean water.

Pushed deeper, dangling limp, descending low
Waiting for a rescue that won't come
Pondering the question of how
You got to this wretched hell
Missing the sun's warm rays
The zephyrs' cool breaths
Like a kiss
Wafting
Free.

Author notes

First ever Etheree. Actually, this is a double Etheree, or however you call it.
The poetry form, Etheree, was created about twenty years ago by an Arkansas poet named Etheree Taylor Armstrong. It consists of 10 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10 syllables. Etheree can also be reversed and written 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1. Double Etheree: Double Etheree: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 10, 9, 8, 7, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1.
--Dapigster
Age 11

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  • e m i l y
    August 23, 2008
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    I am so scared of drowning but I loved this poem.
    Thank you for entering and for your patience.


  • Redeemed15
    August 11, 2008

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    Drowning is one of my worst fears. To be there knowing your gonna die by loss of oxygen. You've captured it Chloe! I think that Drowning Etheree would be a uniques title.


  • dryed-up-eyes
    August 11, 2008

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    it's so good. how old r u?! Coz i still can't write anything but haikus in form written and even then it's terrible


  • crazymomma
    August 10, 2008

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    I really enjoyed how well you did with this form. I am terrified of form poetry lol but you made it look so easy. Very descriptive with vivid and amazing imagery. Well done!