I'm leaning towards the worst decision
There's only one thing that can stop me
You'd better find the nearest phone
And push the ten digits that matter most
You don't want to hear these words
But I'll sharpen every point
And make them bitter sweet
Then put the words between us
You'll be forced to listen
These thoughts have to be said
And maybe you'll understand
How much you ruined my summer
Countless words I've spilled out
Each one concerning you
So much that I could make a book
And slap your name on the cover
"It's not you, it's me"
Doesn't cover this situation
I can't see what I've done wrong
So, I'll flip the phrase around
I still remember that one day
You asked if the room smelled weird
It was fourth period, English
And you were the reason I loved it
I was running late for the bus
And we had reached the double doors
We hugged, as usual
But you wouldn't let go
I hate dwelling on memories
And holding onto fake wishes
Because if you can't keep promises
Then I can't keep this going
Author notes
The first stanza actually started out as a status message on Myspace. I liked it and decided to turn it into a poem.
"Don't Give Up"
The Quote used: "You like me, but you don't wanna be with me. I'm either really dumb, or that makes no sense whatsoever"
A contest entry
- Quotes or a Word Bank! Fun Stuff! *Now open to prewrites!* by Poetryistherapy.
700 points, ended August 15, 2008, 19 entries
Honorable mention
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:'( omg this made me cry. SO much emotion. I am so sorry for all your hurt. This is brilliant.
You have every right to be as angry as you are. I wish there was something i could do to help you. if you ever need to talk i am here.
Thank you for entering my contest it means a lot. -
Well Done
I love the, "it's not you, it's me" stanza. Very clever. This poem speaks truth and emotion. I think it deserves to be rewarded. thanx, conni
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The incomplete touches of the life are the momments which lives in us even with a pain yet they make a place within us..and this is it..you did well to depict it..well done...
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It's smooth and has a good rhythm, it's realistic and is emotional in a way, my only problem is that it's a little on the cliche side. -
wow, incredible. Young too, you're destined for fame for certain. This is an extremely powerful write. You didn't mince words, joke, or apologize. Clean.
In your face kind of write, bet it felt good to get it out. There's no making these feelings up. Congratulations, you're smarter than most people my age.
Excellent, best wishes
jin
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Wonderful! I could totally see myself in every line... including the one about English class... except in my case it was Sign Language...
Thank you so much for entering, and for following my rules!
Good Luck! -
Very much intimacy of your heart with the truth of this life my friend..a heartfelt write indeed..thanks for sharing such an impressive work my friend...
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