i never wanted to understand you
the way you painted you face, hair
and that piece of paper
you were to close for comfort
you were to close to him
and i never wanted to see you laugh
or smile in the very least
you didn't deserve it
not after what you did to me
but i see you in a new light
was it all the pretty colors ?
was it the random interuption
of my piece of mind
im trying harder and harder
i want to understand you
i read your lips now
and your fingertips too
i still saw no light in you
but i'm sorry
for whatever it counts
i know you want to mend it too
i'm sorry that i never gave you a chance
that my heart wont give you one too
i want to say the sorry
i more than that owe too you
Author notes
option #7
A contest entry
- Choices Contest - Big Points Available by Yunalonei.
800 points, ended August 26, 2008, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Good none the less.
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"i still saw no light in you"
(i dont see et eitherrrrrrr) ahahahahha
this i think is one of my favorites.
good job junana. bravo.
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but i see you in a new light
was it all the pretty colors ?
was it the random interuption
of my piece of mind
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i read your lips now
and your fingertips too
i still saw no light in you
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fantasticccc
honestly i wouldn't be able to write something with that much thought and imagery and emotions and such
lots and lots of luck in the contest<3
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yeah you could it was nothing great
hahha
ive seen better in your poems!
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Wowww, dear, I love this =) You wrote it so. Perfectly. I pretty much loved everything about it, you could say. hahah. Especially:
-i read your lips now
and your fingertips too
i still saw no light in you <.<.wow. talk about truthhh!!
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Reading the lips & even the fingertips. Loved how you worded that =)
-and i never wanted to see you laugh
or smile in the very least
you didn't deserve it
not after what you did to me
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Beautifuuuul. I completelay relate =) Woot. Kudos to you, crazy one
♥
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awww
thank you!!!
haha it makes me feel good to write something you like!
hahahahah
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it could be that the pieces I feel
I undestand better, are more relateable
and maybe i read wrong, or too far into things
and though this was simplified. it was real
and a lot of poets can't do that succesfully.
props to you.
keep this up
and just maybe, maybe
if i do get this.
thank you..
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i think you do get it
and your welcome
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awwwww its so beautiful...
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thank you!
yay!!!
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this is very powerful..
and honest.
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thank you !
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i love this poem . alot of imagery
amazing
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Good write
This is a very good write and you have followed my few simple rules which i appreciate.
I like the emotion of the poem and the story you have told.
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gracias!!!
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