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the Femininity of the Moon






I abandon incorrigible laws
    and seek the season of the dawn frog.

Outside my window
    a hummingbird winks at a cherry blossom,
    hovers like an angel
          and then disappears
          into another dimension.

I do not allow myself
    to become stranded on the slopes
    of a presumptuous nation,
          the crown of thorns does not cause
          my brow to bleed.

For I am a child of a new renaissance,
    where daffodils write poetry in the breeze
          and the femininity of the moon
          haunts my dreams

          in delicate beauty.

         
   
   


               

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  • aanika
    August 12, 2008

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    a hummingbird winks at a cherry blossom,
    hovers like an angel
    and then disappears
    into another dimension.

    absolutely beautiful imagery.
    nice write!


  • Brit-Girl
    August 11, 2008

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    "the crown of thorns does not cause
    my brow to bleed."
    i loved that line!

    the imagery and tight diction in this poem combines to make a beautiful poem and highly enjoyable read.
    thanks for sharing
    and thank you for your entry!


  • Nicolette gold member
    August 11, 2008

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    Yes, yes. I love this poem, Marc. Simply beautiful - I can relate to this so very well... that's why I love writing the beautiful. Loved the delicate shine about this one.

    ~ Nicolette