Flower petal falls
His head drops to the table
For she loves him not.
Author notes
Need title ideas. As are most of my pieces, this one is also random.
A contest entry
- Haiku and Bless You! by azure85.
4500 points, ended August 22, 2008, 57 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Flower petal falls
His head drops to the table
For she loves him not.
Your first line is the title in a haiku, and this is a very good one. Ah, the poor guy, in your L3.
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He loves me... he loves me not...
I used to do that all the time in primary school. made me crazy
I love the idea of it, very unique ^^
Good luck with your entry
Claire x -
sad but beautiful
This is so said. :[ I love the idea though of using the old- in my case- "he loves me, he loves me not" idea in haiku form. :]
Good luck in the contest. :]
-Lily♥
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Thats so beautifully sad. In so few lines too, wow.
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So sad. It is really deep. I love it! Good luck in the contest!
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