Slamming and locking the door,
I begin by striking up the Triangle.
Simple, and yet ever so destructive.
As the entire bottle of oxycotton reaches my stomach.
I'm going to play my veins like a violin.
This is my symphony!
I'm the musician and yet the conductor all the same.
Playing my very own composition of delirium.
Crimson Staffs of Coagulated notes fill the theatre.
I collapse into the counter, glass shattering, My symbols.
Fists into the walls, My Percussion strikes hard.
Wearing me thin, i fade into the flutes harmony with the saxophones.
As i fall to the ruinous floor, with Dismay.
I begin Swimming in the debri of my psychotic symphony.
This is my final act.
Author notes
Do you understand it at all?
It's really quite funny how i got the idea..Message if you'd like to know.
A contest entry
- HM winners or Metaphorical poems by Chocoholic156.
550 points, ended September 21, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - prewrites by Ami.
550 points, ended July 12, 124 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think? It just came to mind today.
Comments
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I'm sorry, but Suicide options one and two had to be removed from my contest. Please enter another, if you'd like, of a different option.
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Oh, Okay.
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No biggie, not your fault. I'm the one who didn't read the rules carefully enough to notice that I couldn't have that in my contest. I like your work, though; please, enter another in its place.
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Wow! I'm ever so glad you pointed me out to this one...this is divine!
"I'm going to play my veins like a violin."
I'm speechless...
The way the images are weaved by such crimson words is awe-inspiring!
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I'm very glad you liked it sweetie. This was something different. It was inspired by something, instead of a feeling i had myself.
Hehe.
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Wow. Love it. It kept me reading the whole way through, I was lost in it. Extremely great job!
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Thank you
Brian. ^^
Means alot coming from you, especially after reading your amazing pieces. -nod nod-
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Kind of out of your regular style, but I love it. I find a strange attraction to it in all honesty. You've outdone yourself with this, thank you for sharing it hun.
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I Know
I'm glad you liked it.
I know it's strange and definitly not something i usually write. However i'm tired of my normal emotion on paper.
This is even more emotional and yet metaphorical.
Doing something you would do, Tying something you'd never think of together...
Though you usually have like atleast 3 of those concepts in each piece. I'm starting with one. ^.^
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Of course I fucking liked it, you wrote it nobhead lol. I really liked the similes in this, they're very striking. You surpassed my skill along time ago, you just never realized it.
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^^ Yay
Again, i'm thrilled. I actually do like this piece alot and you know you wont hear that from me much. -nod nod-
Thank you, again.
BLASPHEMY! I wish, i hope someday i can atleast be an apprentice ^^
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