She lies there,
Wrapped in the thin bedding
Of where you both slept.
So still and pale,
The crimson sheets clinging
To her every curve.
Hold your head in your hands.
You remember what you did,
It just seems like a dream.
Stand and look out the window
At the city you both roamed,
The land of the gambler.
Take another look
At the girl you love,
See how she sleeps.
5 Days and counting.
Write the final love note
And leave the cold, empty room.
She's better off this way,
Never to age another year.
Your pretty, little corpse.
Author notes
Inspired by Seraphim Shock
A contest entry
- well....im not sure. by xrain dancerx.
600 points, ended August 22, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow
I love this, I really do.
It has that feel of bittersweet love, the happy memories mixed with the horrible end of the relationship.
There are so many ways to interpret this poem, and thats a great way to have it.
Well done, its a first class write and good luck in the contest
Shelly
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Coool
THat was awesome! Short, but dark, sweet romance.
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this is really beautiful in a sad, angry way. wow. good luck!
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well it says that i havent commented so im going to say this.....i had it wrong b4 that she was dead all along. but its still good and i still love it! lolz.
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oh scott! that was awesome...i loved the way she died at the end and i never saw it coming...damn i sound...just plain messed up. lolz. but idc cause it was great! thanx for entering, scott, and good luck!
*hugs* tay.
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