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Better Left Unsaid

Going though life trying to find love
Problem is, when you think you've found it
The other doesn't know it's there

Trying to spend time with them seems pointless
Trying to get to know them seems impossible
Trying to get them to see the love they share seems heart breaking

Throughout life
There are things better left unsaid
Most of life, talking about love is better left unsaid

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  • Carefuldelusion
    November 14, 2008

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    the last line is perfectly placed and sometimes seems true. This is a short peice and it is beautiful. truely heartfelt. Thank you for sharing,


  • Cavca
    October 24, 2008

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    I like the last line a lot. It is an interesting take on the picture. Thank you for entering. Good luck.


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    October 7, 2008

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    It can feel frustrating when you are looking for love, but once you find it you know it was definitely worth it. This is a good write, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.

    ♥
    whisper


  • etoile
    August 12, 2008

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    heart braking --> heart breaking
    in the last stanza you said unsaid too many times so it took away emotion from the poem.

    it's a good write though, but i don't really feel the emotion in it.

    goodluck in the contest.


  • aanika
    August 11, 2008

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    Throughout life
    There are things better left unsaid

    -- very true.

    second stanza last line, 'braking' --> 'breaking'
    just a heads up, emma said in the contest rules that she doesn't like incorrect spelling


  • slipperssun gold member
    August 11, 2008

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    great write and so true that most would feel it at one point in their lives... i wish you all the best in the contests
    cheers
    Jen


  • Yunalonei
    August 10, 2008

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    Nice

    This is a very nice piece, it is a different take on a love poem which is what i was looking for.
    Good luck in the contest

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