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An angel's angel


I could have been your angel
showing you the way
you choose to go on your own
ending your life that day

I was with you all along
through the loneliness and pain
I carried your heart many times
while you lived your life in vain

I was always on your shoulder
whispering softly in your ear
you just refused to listen
as you wiped away your tears

I have always loved you
when you thought no one cared
the times you were at your lowest
I was always there

You took my love for granted
with your careless ways
You tricked me into believing

you were just going through a phase

Now I sit in mourning
knowing I failed in my quest
hoping you've forgiven yourself
so you can finally rest

I will wait here for my angel
to help heal my broken heart
now knowing, my love meant nothing
You doomed yourself from the start





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  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    October 26, 2008

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    Very powerful and sad!
    I love the way that you expressed yourself
    in this one. Congrats on your trophy and keep
    up the great work here!




    Jeremy0826


  • WildlifeDoc
    October 4, 2008

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    That is just great! I love it! You write beautifully, kiddo, I am impressed!!! Very sad write, you expressed everything you needed to here.


  • nevadapoet
    September 12, 2008

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    What a beautiful write, a great entry for this contest. A perfectly penned write with great flow and good imagery. Thank you for the entry. Keep the pen flowing...the pleasure was all mine.
    Nevadapoet


  • lovemedeath
    September 8, 2008
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    wow !!! i lov3d this poem!!!!!!! great wirte!!!!! keep up the great job!


  • banrion
    September 8, 2008

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    This is a wonderful poem and a positive one too. Too many give up when they are bereaved...that is the time to embrace the life you have.
    I loved this. Well done you.
    SarahJane


  • Harlequin Dance
    September 7, 2008

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    Eh, the rhyming seems a bit forced, especially on line 25, it seems like you put "quest" in there just so you could make it rhyme. Also, it has a bit of a problem flowing from line to line in some places--too many syllables, or too few, made reading it like stopping and starting a car at a red light.

  • kmp6597
    September 7, 2008
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    love it


  • Angelflower
    September 7, 2008

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    This was a really wonderful write!! I love the way it flows and the emotion in this was wonderful as well!! I very much enjoyed reading this! Thank you very much for sharing!!


    Angel


  • colie50
    September 7, 2008
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    Beautifully written! I loved it. It was so sad and moving! Excellent penmanship.

  • Shama T Bukhari
    September 7, 2008

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    !its breath taking

    reaing yur poetry is lik taking a journey to the heaven.its soooo sooooothing and verses ar beautiful.


  • Darker Side To Light
    September 7, 2008
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    This is a very powerful poem, I loved reading it.


  • stavykm gold member
    September 4, 2008

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    This Is Very Powerful Emotionally

    This is an increadible poem. Such deep love in your heart you poured out in this poem and then so hurt from the one whom couldn't recieve your love. It's true so many times people will take the blame on for someone elses mistakes but you bodly stated in such a healthy way that,

    I will wait here for my angel
    to help heal my broken heart
    now knowing, my love meant nothing
    You doomed yourself from the start

    Such bold honesty which I truly enjoy. I don't know whether it was personal or just for the contest but you obiously have a very tender heart.
    Wishing you many blessings
    Much Love
    Kelle Marie

    • Stingersinger53 gold member
      September 4, 2008
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      It was picture inspired. I just wrote what I personally saw in the picture. That is why the title is what it is.
      Thanks for reading!!!


  • poeticweaver gold member
    August 31, 2008

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    Wow,

    Such a powerful piece here you have inscribed dear one.
    You can feel the reaching out for another, and the will for them to be Victorious.
    Great Job, much love, Timothy aka your ap pops.


  • fallingintoadream
    August 10, 2008

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    its a good poem. it has good flow and rhyme. i'm sorry for the pain you and your friend have had to endure and i hope that your heart can heal.


  • individuality gold member
    August 10, 2008

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    sometimes i think that we are our own worst enemies and we do doom ourselves right from the beginning - no matter that others love us, we have to love ourselves first. a good poem, sad in the atmosphere but that is life at times, sad.


  • Manish
    August 10, 2008

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    Great Poem

    The poem is very touching. This is really a nice poem, I say. I really like it! Every stanza is so touchably sad. I like this poem a lot.

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