Memories of the days gone by,
painful days that made me cry.
I remembered how both of you went seperate ways,
way back then, on that fateful day.
Though i was still young and clueless,
i understood what was happening nevertheless.
Ever since you've been apart,
life has never been the same.
Both of you were shouting at each other,
regardless of one another.
I could hear my mum screaming in her room,
pain has already had her heart consumed.
It pains me to see,
both, heart broken to a certain degree.
How i wish to see the both of you,
together starting anew.
But that's just my wishful thinking,
it'll never come true.
Knowing how much hatred one has already grown,
the answer to my wish is thus known.
This part of my childhood memories,
will be etched in my head, now, forever and always.
A contest entry
- All ages allowed:Memories,write about your strongest memories. by pop123.
525 points, ended September 2, 2008, 17 entries
Silver trophy winner
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its just horrible...thanks for your comment anyways
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im sorry you had to go threw that....
i never had a dad so i wouldnt knnow..
how it feels
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Thanks!
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Your poems are filled with emotions… this makes me feel for you and the pain you went through… I can capture the moment as if that was I in that situation…. Very sad but very good poem… this is very well written and laid out….
This really deserves a trophy… congratulations on your win!
Great Write!
Shuberth
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thanks
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Your pain emanates from the poem and I believe the strength of the memory will forever influence your work. But see it for the best, girl
All the best yeah -
Thanks for your comment, i'll try to improve
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Thank you for your entry in the contest, an unusual and interesting poem but we feel that the rhyme and flow are not constant and in places the rhyme seems forced or non-existent.
Thanks again
Sue and Jeff
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Thats a really painful memory but I can understand it and hope everythings better now.Thanks for your poem.
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