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Family Trip

 
 


Car is stuffy,
smells like dried ice cream and
second grade accidents.
Sky is dark; clouds are salmon-pink mountains.
I swear the whole scene is a painting.
Distorted voices echo from seats ahead,
there are no replies.
My head has fallen to my shoulder,
bobbing with the pulse of 100kph,
awkward highway sleep.




Author notes

Option three, I used:
-sky
-fallen
-I swear
-distorted
-voice

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  • new born
    January 31
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    So sweet. I like it a lot. Great imagery & wording.

  • Asabouros.
    August 12, 2008

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    Me thoughts be of contentment, dear wonderbandalice.

    I really like this, interesting direction to take the prompt in.