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What Was Left Behind

 

 

Every night we scream in perfect harmony,
the poison words slip from your lips to mine,
and each kiss brings us closer to freedom;
this grotesque requiem we write, word for word,
on the verge of sanity; that's what makes it so painful.

Every night you, my reflection, remind me,
these tattered clothes are no longer fashionable,
nor this rusted lock without a key;
At the beginning I assumed we were merely forsaken,
but I think ignored may be closer to the truth.
We aren't so isolated that our cries aren't heard,
and yet not a single query is raised
in the direction of our dilapidated hell.

 

Every night I slip into displaced fantasies,
lying on my side to slightly escape the pain,
and watching one more bruise blossom on your skin;
I know you're watching mine as well,
less able to slip into dreaming delusions,
taking comfort in the fact that I share your pain.
maybe this loathing was the remedy all along,
either that, or the disease has spread to my mind.

If you would only close the door when you leave.

Author notes

Words used (in order): Harmony, poison, grotesque, requiem, verge, reflection, tattered, forsaken, isolated, query, dilapidated, displaced, blossom, delusions, loathing, remedy, disease.

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  • Victoria of Aragon
    August 15, 2008

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    Oh, my. I must agree with the first comment about how perfectly this piece fits with the title. It also reminds me of a poem I wrote a few years back, expressing similar frustrations about how the past will ever scar us, despite wishing that it wouldn't.

    Your flow is nigh flawless, and the picture you paint with the vivid vocabulary is breathless. A truly dark, yet inspirational piece.

    Wonderful entry, and thank you so very much for entering. My Muse's interst in staying has deffinately been peaked.

    • iamlost gold member
      August 22, 2008
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      Thanks so much, and thanks for the gold! This was a great contest.
  • scoff
    August 13, 2008

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    This certainly fits the theme

    of "Lost in Darkness."

    This poem sounds as if you're closing the door on a chapter of your life as well.

    Good write. The image you created is dark, indeed.