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Ashes in the Abyss

Gray in my mouth
As i feel myself chock
Raining down, i see your shadow
Your dead to me
Only floating in the ashes
Of our burnt dreams

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  • amaranthine lover gold member
    September 1, 2008
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    A nice piece, but you didn't put what option it was.


  • silhouette fairy
    August 19, 2008
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    good write but in the fourth line "your" should be "you're"
    but other than that nice job