How to be so happy,
content, alive.
How to survive
alone, aching.
The pain comes
from the same.
How to flush
with longing
And dive into the deep.
Yet remember
what seeps
from your soul
Is yours no more.
Please tell me what you think
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what seeps from my soul? is it love? is it knowledge and if it is mine no more, than whos is it? You dont have to answers these, this is just the thoughts your poem has rendered me.
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Powerful, especially those last few lines - They hit like a ton of bricks and leave the reader thinking about what he/she just read. A short yet extremely effective poem. Truly enjoyed reading this one.
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ouch. the truth hurts.
and that means this is very well done.
its hard to sum up so much in so little but you managed perfectly.
bravo.
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Simple meaning. I liked the last stanza most of all. However the line
'The pain comes
from the same.'
didn't really make sense to me. Maybe it was written in a rhythmic trance,but it just didnt fit...I'd personally change 'same' to something else. Only a suggestion though
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I liked this, the simplicity really works! Neat use of imagery throughout and found the use of sibilance particularly effective. Well structured and the single line ending was surprisingly moving. Thanks for sharing. This is neat write.
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