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Love Flows in a Sigh

i
You are thread and lace enweaved
in cosmic breaths that chime and sing
through sips of sighs on rainbowed skin.

You spin silk in my hands,
and soft, sampled skies
in my eyes.

You shine,

 

and everything sparkles




ii

You are space, and light imbued
in bolts replaced by bulging moons,
now every time you breathe,
you bend the air beneath my feet.

Oh, to borrow wings from words
that coil and curl
in notes around your fingers.

I see you, 

my eyes bloom,


become poets.

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  • untitled.
    December 19, 2008

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    Oh, this is divine in every sense... And to all the senses. I don't know what else to say; you've stolen everything useful in me..

    A speechless reader who will return when words are more fruitful,

    ~S.


  • Grunts Girl gold member
    October 28, 2008

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    of course all the comments below are thoughts of mine as well but i think the strongest area that i enjoyed the most was
    'to borrow wings from words
    that coil and curl
    in notes around your fingers.'
    i left out the 'oh' because i am just not a fan of those lol... congrats on the trophy thingy


  • Leonura
    October 20, 2008
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    Amazing, it was softly read and beautiful. A wonderfully written poem.


  • Sir Squigglim
    October 18, 2008
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    oh my... that is beautiful.

    you definatley have talent


  • sense surreal gold member
    October 8, 2008

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    ah...I am breathless...

    sighing is talking when you're in love

    I could only sigh into this
    you write magic, you really do


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    October 7, 2008

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    wow
    this was breathtaking

    such beautiful emotions and wonderfully expressed thoughts

    i can easily see why this won gold
    this was magnificent

  • celadia
    September 29, 2008

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    this is just amazing the rhyme so original the flow so smooth and the ideas so marvelous, I love it, congrats on the gold, it was well deserved.


  • luna-midnight gold member
    September 27, 2008

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    wow..you are amazing

    i love this poem, congrats on the gold, and well deff keep writting
    Stephanie ♥


  • movedon
    September 16, 2008

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    You deserved the gold for this, hands down. This has such strong imagery and a lovely flow to it. You have a lot of talent, and it shows in this piece!

    Warmest,
    Mylee


  • Angelflower
    September 14, 2008

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    This was really beautiful. I really loved the flow of it.. So soft and peaceful in many ways..  The emotion was lovingly expressed here.. And your metaphors were rightly used.. I truly enjoyed reading this lovely piece! thank you very much for sharing! Congratulations on the Gold, well deserved I believe..

    Angel

  • celadia
    September 13, 2008
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    this is so much what poetry should be, the emotion and word use so divine and just right for the format of the poem.


  • Frozentearz
    August 21, 2008

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    Congratulations on your award this was a wonderful contest with such a great grp of writers. Outstanding work.
    Warm thoughts.
    Frozentearz


  • poet2angels gold member
    August 10, 2008

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    oh my ....................................


    You just have such an affect when I read your poetry...Few can cause this reaction...


    Breathless ache mingled with sigh whirling in air with flutters searching for some breeze .................from somewhere to finally catch my breath....

    wow....the last 2 lines I don't think I will ever forget ..

    I am honored that you chose my little poem to inspire....



    I want to take this time to thank you for being a favorite. You have touched me with your amazing talent more than you know and your kindness and friendship since I first met you in my rounds contest 2 years ago....with your brilliant poem "a conversation" I was amazed then and am still today. Thank you for being someone that I truly admire....
    just for being you

    Lynda♥

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