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for art's sake

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crimson cogs carry victims of infamy;
products of artistry's fatalistic qualities.

            cobain got swallowed up by flames;
            cast by his own tainted reflection.

yet canvas was opportunistic,
reaping spoils of slow demise.

            death dares to expose that heroes,
            would dissolve if not for mortality.

sinking stones are far more dramatic,
than any one of life's more pacific pools.

 

 

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  • poet2angels gold member
    August 25, 2008

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    The title so well speaks of the spirit dwelling within this poem...It was haunting to me just reading this ...Something about it got to me and captivated me until the end leaving me longing to remain...I love this!

    Lynda


  • notorious gold member
    August 11, 2008
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    Your magic here is apparent.


  • Joan-of-Arc
    August 10, 2008

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    ohh this is cool .Nice use of alliteration, and vocabulary . I'm envious of it. You use scholarly diction, but in a precise way, so that they do not overshadow the poem. Cobain was a tragic fellow...

    great piece.

    -joan.


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  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    August 9, 2008

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    This is great Marky and a very interesting picture it has really gave you some inspiration thanks for sharing much love always


  • Cannonsfire
    August 9, 2008

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    Oh I love the reference to Cobain! A man caught up in his own world of self destruction and yet full of that talent and brave lyrics. Nice job here and hey...why aren't you my Bro?? huh huh?

  • notorious gold member
    August 9, 2008
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    Bookmarking...that pic is RAD.


  • luna-midnight gold member
    August 9, 2008

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    this is awesome here Mark *hugs*
    i really enjoyed reading, you gave so much depth to the picture, take care
    Stephanie ♥

  • notorious gold member
    August 9, 2008
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  • notorious gold member
    August 9, 2008

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    Tangelo good?

    OH COOL!!!
    You didn't tell me you wrote me something based on this picture!!! I had to find out for myself by clicking on it.

    "for art's sake"
    Well, groovy title if I ever did see one. Kind of makes me think of "For fuck's sake" (or FFS, as gamer geeks have shortened it too. )

    "crimson cogs carry"
    Your alliteration is so fun & well-done.
    Do you know how many people suck at alliteration?!!!
    You're not one of them, thankfully.

    "victims of infamy"
    Methinks Hollywood.
    Or maybe even magical magicians.
    I dunno. 'tis cool though!

    "artistry's fatalistic qualities."
    'fatalistic' is quite a mouthful--it's deligbtfully pretentious...I like the possessive form as well.

    "Cobain got swallowed up by flames"
    Are you talking about Nirvana's Kurt Cobain? You must be. I fancy the lowercase aspect (surprisingly enough), but he's important. He should be capitalized.
    Bit of a bittersweet line. But I like it.

    "cast by his own tainted reflection."
    Blood, sweat & tears?
    Gives me a magical feel 'cause of 'cast'. Hogwarts!!!

    "yet canvas was opportunistic"
    Brings 'fatalistic' to mind, which you used before. Makes me think of...an empty slate--nice.

    "death dares to expose that heros"
    Should be 'heroEs' with the 'e' maybe?
    Man, I love Spider-Man. I think he's inspirational.

    "if not for mortality."
    All life's crap seems to point back to us plebeians. LoL

    "are far more dramatic"
    Simple but true. Poignant much?

    "life's more pacific pools."
    Pacific Ocean!! Yeah!!

    This should be dedicated to me...muahahaha, maybe not. The tone of this poem would be odd for a dedication poem.


    • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
      August 9, 2008

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      Yeppers heros should have been heroes.

      This poems is dedicated to those like, Cobain, Jim Morrison, etc who suffered to give us art.

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