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Soiled

burnt tenement wall
charcoal garbage ground cover
slum garden flowers

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What goes aground, grows aground.  Say that five times fast, or once even for laughs.

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  • Cynewulf
    August 20, 2008
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    Good image, good use of alliteration contrasted with fricatives in the second & third lines.


  • Age of Rain
    August 15, 2008
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    What great vocabulary here, the ahah was also very well done.