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Judgment

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Judgment

You dare to bring this slime before my throne;
a mere male that breeds contemptuous lust!
I’m so amused by this pitiful drone,
who has ravaged young girls preempting their trust.
Like a snake that crawls upon his breastbone,
begging forgiveness despite my disgust.
My charge is to judge this repugnant male
to execute him… or send him to jail.

I think of the beauty that he has destroyed
and the innocent maids that he has betrayed.
I suspect the daughters he has decoyed,
now live on the streets and hide in the shade.
I believe their lives are so paranoid
that they only survive when thighs are splayed.
So I must decide the fate of this worm,
from a feminine hand, a hand that is firm.

So here’s my decision, here’s my decree;
I lay down the law and call to order,
for this man I shall grant no amnesty.
Bind fast his limbs, we shall draw and quarter,
for crimes of immoral atrocity 
and shall seal his fate with blood and mortar.
In the end it is woman, far superior,
to lowly men who are inferior.

 

 

 

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Art work: A Time for Dying by *Wynterskye

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  • Desire gold member
    August 12, 2008

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    Wow~~

    Oh My the last two lines- just lay it down- I felt the book close and gavel slammed-
    I have not tried this form in quite some time but You just weave it with ease
    The energy races through the veins and can be felt as she administers resolution~
    You took the picture and brought words-
    spoken from her lips-Excellent!!
    Love Your Avator too

    Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
    -Throws confetti-
    Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo


    Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • PerVirtuous
    August 12, 2008

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    Leaves the bunnies and slinks away embarrassed by his mere maleness.

    Oh, my! You have had your fun with this one. Sometimes it is a blast to just let go and let a picture write the poem itself. I think you did a great job of that and deserved the gold! Have three bunnies.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    August 11, 2008

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    Yes, most deserving of gold, and I have a few ideas myself about how to punish child molesters. As for the statement about 'men being inferior,' which I’m sure was merely in jest; remember, woman was created from man, so in essence, we are equals, or at least that is my opinion. I like to think that both sexes have something to offer to society, and each other. Once again, great entry Amera.


    With much love,
    mj.


    • kiwigirljacks gold member
      August 11, 2008
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      I'm happy to be a man's rib myself.. that means I come from close to his heart right?

      Was a bit of fun this write, but very tongue-in-cheek. However, I should like her to be ruling over child molesters an such for sure!


    • Amera gold member
      August 11, 2008
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      It's fiction Michael.

  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 10, 2008

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    I love this!! It's a real bitch slap! lol

    I know this is done slightly tongue-in-cheek... but damn there are some guys out there that I would like to set before that throne of judgement!

    A scathing write, that is fantastically penned!! Woot!


    • Amera gold member
      August 11, 2008
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      hehe... thanks, I don't really feel this way about men but the picture seemed to beg for this poem.


  • notorious
    August 10, 2008

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    How scathing

    Female empowerment...that's my vibe here.

    It's bitter & has an interesting rhyme scheme that must have taken aeons (or you are naturally proficient at rhyming).

    "this slime to my throne"
    This cracks me up.

    "a mere male"
    LoL...this is how I'm getting the female empowerment vibe, ya know?

    "contemptuous lust!"
    Did you mean this write to be comical? The exclamation mark here feels jocular...it would look more serious w/o it, which I would prefer, personally.

    'preempting'<--love this word & forgot it existed

    "daughters he has decoyed."
    Fabulous...

    "a hand that is firm."
    Hell yeah!

    Good luck

    • Amera gold member
      August 11, 2008
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      Thank you so much for reading my poem; I mean really reading it. Your comment is targeted and well taken. To answer your question; yes, I do write the majority of my work in rhyme. I’m a formal poet ant that’s just my “poetic voice”. This poem does not express my real feelings, your great picture just spoke to me.


  • luna-midnight gold member
    August 10, 2008

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    this is awesome, love the flow and depth and emaning you gave to this, its wonderful, go girls and down with men,lol
    good luck and take care
    Stephanie ♥


  • echo-ink
    August 10, 2008

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    Yessa!!! You give 'um hell, Amera,

    Can I please hold one of the legs???? Hehehe
    I loved this, HA! Damn men, anyway.

    This should be in a contest, go look for one, ???yeah???? Love always, your friend PL xx


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    August 9, 2008
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    Sis, this is FUN (believe it or not!).


  • Skybow silver member
    August 9, 2008

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    Wow Amera, makes me glad I was born with the right sex at least. This is powerful and scary. I like it.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    August 9, 2008

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    A lovely dark Ottava Rima with more than a hint of cruel humour.
    The third stanza adds a lot to the poem as it was when I first read it.
    Just remind me never to get you passing judgement!!!

    Great stuff


  • StarEyes
    August 9, 2008

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    Can we add my ex in there? He is perfect for that! WOW! What a great job you did on this one! I am sorry this missed the contest! Wow! this should have a gold on it!! Fantastic!!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Pure Thought silver member
    August 9, 2008

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    All the reservists got together

    Filled it up quick, cause they knew you were coming.

    Great poem.

    Better idea for handling slime.


    • Amera gold member
      August 9, 2008
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      hahaha.... thanks! What would I do without you?


  • paulcreates silver member
    August 9, 2008
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    Yikes!

    >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>running

  • paulcreates silver member
    August 9, 2008

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    Well if I was the head waiter I'd kick a couple of the "reserved" out and make room for this beauty. This flows SO smoothly! Excellent!

    Paul


  • Rovingone gold member
    August 9, 2008

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    Ooo, this reminds me of something from Ann Bishop's The Black Jewels Trilogy. That's treatin' him like a man.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    August 9, 2008

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    Worm?

    I at-least want to be a night-crawler.
    And I'll lead the scum of inch worms.
    A very excellent piece that fits the prompt perfectly.
    Thanks teach for sharing such talent as always!

    -Timothy


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    August 9, 2008

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    I am very thankful that I am not a mere male, you certainly know how to dish out the punishment

    Love
    Sue


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    August 9, 2008

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    well done honey VEry impressive.

    Thanks for sharing with us.
    Love you

    Passions


  • HisDirtyLiLPoet
    August 9, 2008

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    Woweee! Talk about striking a nerve! This is an awesome piece. Kept me on the edge of my seat. Thank you for this truly dark talent you have shown today.

    All my love,
    She-ra


  • Swan song gold member
    August 9, 2008
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    I did not mean to do it!!!! Have mercy lol


  • Faeryn
    August 9, 2008

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    Oh my. This is really good. It's not in a contest and that makes me worry...
    Excellent poem, Amera. The form is awesome as is the rhyming.
    Love,
    Tay

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