I threw a stone on a river
and formed were many ripples
acting as whittles
seeming to make the dull chipper
the ripples subsided
as the river posed calm and tranquil
like a mad patient after a sleeping pill
who seems like but is not dead
Peace prevailed only when
the river got back to the original state
much like a stellate
river-in-shape spake ben
Much like a river that lost
as much water by way of ripples
but in noway acting as cripples
for it still stays in the river that is so vast
Is my heart
that is shattered beyond pieces
as the love in the tiny bit increases
failing to love-impart
Like a magnet
crushed beyong faith and belief
and strewn all over the great-barrierless-reef
attracting the iron that is so wet
would be my heart when
broken beyong shape
still loving you agape
with all the pieces said ben
Author notes
Though my heart may be broken i can still love you with all the broken pieces
A contest entry
- Prompt contest by Brokentruth93.
300 points, ended August 13, 2008, 7 entries
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Comments
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Unconditional love given even when it is returned with hurt and pain. What a beautiful poem. Your words were so special, and you are so gifted with choice. I loved this piece and thought the flow and rhyme were just spot on. Thanks for sharing with us.
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thank you for entering. In some places I found this quite remarkable but in others it was as if you searched for a rhyme just to find a rhyme ... it disrupted the flow and the meaning. The last word ben ... ?
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thank you for entering my contest. I love how you try to rhyme the first and last lines, and the two middle lines. but sometimes when you do that, the stanza doesn't make sense to me. thank you for entering my contest!
~~Jessica Noelle
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