Once upon a time I escaped my fear,
Tears became the color of a beautiful blood red
my fear that of a marble chalk white.
Stress was red and black.
Once Upon a time I thought you had won.
But now you see me standing strong.
Holding my head up high.
Once Upon a time I though you where my Queen.
The one whode save me the one I'd need
Once upon a time is done and your not even close to a queen. Your jus the evil stepmother trying to play dress up in her grandmothers clothes. To bad that big bad wolf is on his way to gobble you up.
A contest entry
- Mistakes and Memories by whiterabbit..
380 points, ended August 28, 2008, 24 entries
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this is pretty cool , i like how you gave everything a color and stuff. that's really neat.
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I like this. I really like your use of colors in the first stanza. This is very well written. The only mistakes I see are a few spelling/grammar errors. Thanks for entering.
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Wow, thats very descriptive, going along with stories but fitting them into a different point of yiew, yours, Nice :3
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ooooh i remember you tell me about this one too... well the ending at least. lol and yes I do very much so like the ending as well
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Omg, the end was amazing... That was wonderfully done! Good job!!!
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