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Living Again

Never before have i felt so alive
Your love is like air
Without it I'd die

A touch like no other 
Eyes like fire
To have all of you there
Is my one true Desire

All this time I've felt so numb
Closing up for all eternity
The demons had won

You woke me up from the pain
And once again made me whole
For helping me feel sane
I love you more then you will ever know

Author notes

I'm usually horrible at coming up with poems on the spot, but i gave this my best shot. Inspired by Bring Me To Life by Evanescence

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  • carebear123
    May 4
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    i like this. it could have more emotion but for an on the spot poem its really good!


  • Titus gold member
    April 30

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    You've been tagged.
    Well, yearning is ok, as long as the other sees it original and unique. Winging this is not, so you are half way threre, dude, Both insanity and sanity are affected at this point, well done.


  • Kathraina silver member
    February 1
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    Judged-ola!

    This is a good take on your prompt. I like the love coming from this ^.^


  • Emerald-Eyes
    February 1

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    This is really great, I love the feelings that are coming from it and I can really relate to it.
    Well done, great write


  • funpum
    January 30
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    Simplicity makes the point so much more acutely than words dressed in beautiful bows...


  • Zane Rose
    January 6

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    This is very simple, but very "felt" as many others have put it. I couldn't agree with them more. Sorry to use this word but its the only one I can think of. This is very CUTE poem.
    Good job, good luck, and keep up the great writing!
    ~AEO~


  • hollowriver
    January 5
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    I think its the rhyme and heart felt romantic view that pulls you in.
    well done
    hugs


  • Need For Redemption
    December 24, 2008
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    I love the way you ryme. Very nice rythme and flow


  • trekkergirl
    December 22, 2008

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    I like this one very much! You did a great job for spur of the moment. You have rhyme that doesn't feel forced. A good flow. Interesting. Imagery. Creative. Great job! Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.


  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    December 8, 2008
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    Thank you for your lovely write, Josie


  • Maybe Anastasia
    November 24, 2008

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    wow this is very much "felt." I really like it and thought the flow was pretty good. the only thing I didn't like was the first stanza has no rhyme but the rest does. But as a whole I loved it. great write. and thanks for the entry


  • Angelo di Luce gold member
    November 9, 2008
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    Did she do all that to you?
    must be something special
    Well done


  • catalyst.
    September 22, 2008
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    KI enjoyed the simplicity of this. Straight to the point but beautiful none the less


  • sapphireangelwings
    September 16, 2008
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    I think I am in the " numb," place. Totally relate to that line. Nicely written!


  • innocence jaded.xx
    August 24, 2008
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    -A touch like no other
    Eyes like fire
    To have all of you there
    Is my one true Desire
    ...

    Ohhh, haha, I definitely know THAT feeling. It's an overwhelming one, at that. Someone always being on your mind...Desiring them like no other. It actually drives me insane at times. Beautifully penned. Thank you so much for entering & I wish you the best of luck with everything ! ♥


  • PrInCeSs AnAsTaCiA
    August 24, 2008
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    lovely write thanks for sharing best of luck


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    August 22, 2008

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    This is a great love write. There is nothing like finding your love. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.

    ♥
    whisper


  • breakdown-beatdown
    August 21, 2008

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    this is well written i love the line "You woke me up from the pain
    And once again made me whole" it makes me smile


  • eightball666
    August 17, 2008

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    Very good. Almost describing exactly the way I feel about the one that I love. She rekindled so many dead emotions that I thought I would never feel again.

    Very good, and good luck!


  • Climax
    August 16, 2008

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    Well Done.

    In life we gain and we lose...
    On this poem you did well with the words you choose.

    But my dear friend you never know...
    Maybe to a gold trophy it might just go.


  • Sheilasbabygal4life
    August 11, 2008
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    This was good I liked it keep writin I knew u could do it good job!!~


  • Lsh-x
    August 11, 2008
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    This is short and to the point, i liked it.

    It's one of my favourites so far!
    Keep it up.

    I liked this paragraph:

    'You woke me up from the pain
    And once again made me whole
    For helping me feel sane
    I love you more then you will ever know'

    Well done, and Good Luck


  • Synthetic-Nightmare
    August 10, 2008
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    Wow

    i must say this was really good! ^_^
    i especially love this paragraph:

    "All this time I've felt so numb
    Closing up for all eternity
    The demons had won"

    i don't know, there's something chilling yet poetically beautiful about it. Very impressed i must say


  • stargazer.
    August 9, 2008

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    I like the way you ended it "You woke me up from the pain And once again made me whole" thats my favorite part.Great poem all together .

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