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Forever Love

few moments in time
we wake up realizing
you have met your soul-mate
looking into eyes of the future
sought for so long

trembling in arms
that finally held you
making love to the one
who stood beside while saying goodbye
to a grandmother
before she left this world

making memories in walmart
laughing as we played like kids
loving how you touch my soul
with just a sweet glance

but now as my father lay
in a hospital room
having open heart surgery
trying to dry my tears
but letting my fears fall
on you

a whisper of an angel's breath
to my ear...it will be okay
my better half and
world until the end



Author notes

"Led Zeppelin"
Prompt:
Keith Urban-You're My Better Half

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UubhvRYWnWc

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  • InvisibleMan silver member
    September 17

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    inspirational

    A lucky man,the one you write about. An obvious depth of feeling that holds this piece up in granite arms. Ain't love grand? ;-)


  • Rick Weston silver member
    August 15

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    a reader caught up in the emotion of your lines - laughing, smiling, sighing and crying as the poet commands. very well written story.


  • poet2angels gold member
    September 29, 2008

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    This brought tears to my eyes...
    Such a beautiful piece....This shows how much your "soulmate" means to you...
    This is gorgeous and I see why you won gold

    Lynda


  • wvtwinklestar gold member
    September 12, 2008

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    Excellent Write

    i love your emotions felt in this poem..a whisper of an angel's breath to my ear..it will be okay
    Love,
    Conni'


  • Rovingone gold member
    September 10, 2008

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    This is deserving of a gold award. I just adore this sort of writing. It isn't pretentious and it gives a true, strong message of love and compassion. It's inspiring to me to read such work, always making me realize I can attempt to capture such brilliance in my work, (though no one is saying I will.) Brilliant.


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    August 24, 2008

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    Moving !

    That was incrediable a story teller Bar None! you do evey one a service a AP with your poetry,

     well penned, great composition and flow was endless.

     

     

    Blessings

     

     

    Rend


  • stargazer.
    August 9, 2008

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    Im in a bit of a country mood

    SheDaisy-Come Home Soon
    http://www.songmeanings.net/lyric.php?lid=3530822107858517206
    or
    Tim Mcgraw-Dont Take The Girl
    http://www.songmeanings.net/lyric.php?lid=91541

    If you prefer a different genre just tell me.
    _____________________________________________________
    Keith Urban-You're My Better Half

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UubhvRYWnWc

    http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/keithurban/youremybetterhalf.html

    Keith Urban-Raining On Sunday

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gxDuckV7IAY

    http://www.cowboylyrics.com/lyrics/urban-keith/raining-on-sunday-9454.html


    • Soft-Rain
      August 21, 2008
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      DanielleNicole

      Wow sweety i am so honored and humbled! I was surprised yeah!
      Again thank yousss


      ~Lisa~

    • Soft-Rain
      August 9, 2008
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      Hun i am in West Viriginia, us redneck girls love country!
      Country is stories, sort of like poetry of real life in motion.
      Besides i already did others like Night Wish and Evanessence.
      This is a breath of fresh air!

      Hugs
      ~lisa~

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