She destroys everyones life
especially her mom's.
Her mom hates her so much that her
heart aches in distress.
She has one more life to destroy,
she's planed it so well that it can never
go wrong.
It won't hurt at all,
she'll just overdose herself.
She writes allot to release her stress and pain,
but she has no one to read it,
no one to say, "hi how are you doing,
are eating right,
are you sleeping at nights?
No!!!, because they can all see the
black bags under her eyes
and see how thin she is getting day by day.
She uses the internet to fulfill a part
of her that as not been fulfilled.
She cries allot but has no one to
wipe her tears,
When she sleeps all she has are
nightmares.
So she stays awake.
What does she do all night?
She hangs out on the internet
until day lights.
♥Ashley Blapro♥
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A contest entry
- Emotional Wreck by ToxicSuicide.
750 points, ended January 11, 34 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Are you a "Destroyer"?
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A beautiful description of a girl crying out for help. But there is the a way out of mess - writing. That's how you can always let everything out, everything that's smothering you.
Well done!
Nela
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She writes allot to release her stress and pain,
i think you mean "a lot"
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oohh the pain I feel in this
overdose herself... I think would be better as just overdose...
writes allot -- typo alot
quite a few other typo's in here hun but I think you really have a good write here once you've polished it up
this poems speaks out to me your reason for AP maybe??
a well deserved shiny there. Keep up the good work xx
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A very sad but beautiful piece. It always pains me to see others going through. Life can be harsh at times. The despair of this poem is palpable. I enjoyed it very much.
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good write
It always saddens me to see young people so filled with pain and thoughts of harming themselves. Hopefully these dark thoughts were for the contest only and not true feelings. One way or another here's a hug from me to you.
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very sad, if only someone would care enough to lend a helping hand.
the flow could be better, but as i read it kept me wanting more. good job, keep writing.
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Humm..you make me curious here about the status of her..and her worries you have..very touching and very much thought provoking as well..well done.
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This is almost scary. It explains my life somewhat.. you did great with this though. Thank you so much for entering my contest and good luck!
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oh, yes, i am! By the way, a lot is 2 words.
... i think...?really deep one, well done.
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Oh this was very different. I loved the flow it has. The rhyming was pretty awesome too. Very sad poem though, great one
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