Wasted time nameless faces,
mortuary on the ground,
crying, shifting in its grief.
Won't you touch me?
Please?
I'm so alone.
Hapless names wasted on pretend camoflauge,
working within the parameters of what's safe and doesn't matter.
All this politically correct banter,
clinical and bereft of any true emotion,
leaves us drowning in an ocean with no substance.
Dig deeper.
Say anything.
Say what you know is the wrong thing,
contradict or even deny me.
Please just interact freely,
unleash your creativity.
No more fluffy extracts of the psyche.
That's not how it was meant to be used.
Please touch me deeper with your words,
piss me off, provoke me to reply with some hateful dialogue,
about something more important than how shallow we all are.
Enlighten me...enlighten me...
make me dig deeper.
Show me some piece of truth.
Shift my spirit,
even if only a little.
Author notes
Just a rant from a bored poet/reader.
A contest entry
- Vent it out! by Lsh-x.
600 points, ended August 11, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Does the poetry you read move you, does it ever upheave your beliefs?
Comments
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wow
apparently my tits and your cock really can make an impact
Our book "how to become a global world power using only your genitals" is going to be a bestseller
and now we can add "controversial" to the dust jacket -
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"How to Gain Power and Influence People with your Tits and Cock: The Transgender Guide to Business Accumen."
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Oh.
Are you bored? Boredom bores me, Poet, do you know?
I think you are a liar. You cannot be bored. You will make poetry from any piece of boredom. Like here.
Now:
Poem from me to me
I read my cliches
and find nothing new there
knowing
poems are not for new
but for creative share
of old
to write new is easy
it is the old
we do not grasp
Be well, Poet and may you be bored often.
Myra
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Thank you for complimenting the piece with an apt response. I'm not complaining about you though. You write interesting and profound poetry, and structure it beautifully.
I irrationally wish that there ws a site we could visit that only had poetry of a higher caliber and where the goal was to learn about writing and had a gestalt of learning incorporated into it's framework.
AP used to be say whatever you want. I think it was more of a learning environment. But in the persuit of ratings/finance/continuity...there's about, I'd estimate, a 10% ratio of good poems worth writing. Not all of them have good grammer, or follow a structure, but they do express some aspect of the human condition in a way others can relate to, and perhaps are affected by, an could maybe even learn from.
AP is a poetry site for everybody. I don't think there's a poetry site out there for poets. -
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Well Poet ...
I am sure your boredom is being lifted!
Allow me this one comment: WE as POETS give the nature and character to a website. And: if we want to do poetry, let us do so with focusedness and with purpose. I am sure you would rather see Allpoetry amongst the higher ranks, than letting it go to decay?
I am not judgemental. One may write in poems whatever one wishes, but we must educate poets to write coherent comments, and that we can only do by interaction. And this is what I try to do. Otherwise we are geese cackling into twilight melancholy ...
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We only provide the content. The framework and overall direction of the site is controlled by someone else. I don't give a shit if AP goes up or down in the internet rankings, as long as I can continue to post poetry here and can say what I want at the very least, in that medium.
I think I'd prefer that AP goes back to the awesome nitch site of yore, obscured, and never sucking off to the man...as it is now.
I have no intention of controlling it one way or another.
I just want to write poetry here and get responses.
I can't say I've ever got a comment that hurt me.
At worst I learned something, or got one perspective of something I wrote. That is the value.
I appreciate admiration...but admire honest and visceral opinions. There's not nearly enough of that going around.
Comments are opinions...not critiques. I'd prefer that they are an honest response as opposed to a menial structured template.
You should rally just as hard on every "Great Write!" comment as you have here. Acari27 actually said something creatively, and with wit. It was an awesome compliment.
Your argument that "it's dirty" holds no water.
It has value.
And it's dirty.
And I like that.
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I never used the word dirty.
Why would you?
I said I am disgusted.
If (beautiful) intimacy is displayed in public, it loses its value.
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It's a word people often use to express such disgust. Dirty words. I think you're calling the comment dirty. Even though you didn't explicitly use that word.
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Hahha. I love acari27's comments. It's sounds like great porn and you can send me copy to ..................
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As soon as we hook up, we're gonna make some internet money.
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This is another great one from a brilliant poet venting his boredom and disbelief of others not being true! Great stuff as always. Good luck on the contest.
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I think you've followed the parameters of the contest well, this poem was really venting. good luck in contest.
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danka
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well, theres me
im out there
trying to find something that moves me
we could join forces
with your cock and my tits,
we could rule the world
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I think this is the kind of comment ...
that should be banned from this website. It disgusts me. And I am very tired to read the erotic nonsense that we are showered with. Please be decent enough to remove this. It is an honest and friendly request.
This poem deserves a better comment. I am sure you can understand that comments were meant to reflect understanding of the text. Comments like this of yours, you can keep for private IM's ... then you may find it loses its impact.
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wow, requesting censorship,
odd for a poet
id call it heresy,
but neurosine was far more diplomatic
your comments I felt were full of contradictions, and subjective rather illogical judgements
good for you
though a tad overdramatic
i think your comments Re banning were hasty, and you took my comment out of context
i think if you are trying to 'educate' you may want to reconsider requesting 'offending' comment be removed from the sight of anyone else....i think the Nazis did that, ...doesnt work out so well in the end
how can you ask for others to be censored then feel at ease saying whatever you wish...
you must sit in a lofty tower
but having said that
i also understand poets are passionate people, that is ok, good even...
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Censorship is much less attractive than profanity and a great deal of the "obscenity" out there in the world. Just because you take it as nasty or disgusting, doesn't mean everyone else does, or that that's how it is. I smiled warmly at the comment.
Don't limit others because of your own perceptions.
Please.
I thought it was funny and felt complimented. I think with my cock and her tits we could do alot in the world. Maybe even make it better.
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Thank you for giving me the freedom to say my heart ...
and for not deleting my comment. I stand by what I said. There is a place and a time for all things. The fact that you do not think these words nasty or disgusting, does not make it better for me. I think we understand each other well.
This is your poem, so you know which kind of comments you value. I, as a reader, may bring to this poem my own value. And I honestly think it would have been better for you to get a decent comment and not this utter decadence. It really disillusioned me.
This website is interactive. So allow me my comment, do not censor ME by asking ME to accept HERS. She may comment in whatever way she wants to. And so may I. -
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I don't think I've ever deleted a comment. I would certainly not delete one of yours no matter how strongly I disagreed.
I didn't disagree with this one, but certainly differed.
I don't know if you're entitled to your opinion, but it takes no effort for me to allow you to express it freely.
I don't think bad things happen from people expressing themselves verbally.
All the bad things come from others reactions.
The more viewpoints and opinions the reader has,
the more educated their decision.
Words are never bad or good. Neither are the sentences they create. They are beautiful or ugly only by our perception of them.
They are innocent though, however arranged.
We give them every ounce of power we think they contain.
Like any tool, they can be utilized productively or used as a weapon.
It all depends on the readers fear or understanding. And wholly relies on their perceptions. This differs from one mind to another.
What words are profane? Which ones are beautiful?
None.
These things are only in the mind of the reader. -
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I do not see this as bad ... being able to write my opinion ...
I see it as enlightenment. I do not see intimacy as ugly. On the contrary. But: should you read my poem, Laurel of Love, you would understand my utter dismay. I think intimacy is being made to shallowness and to public mockery. So please for the record: if you should want to do that, you are free to do so. But: fragment your soul, for what price? Emptiness and a feeling if marginality, numbness and utter depression.
Well.
There is something to smile about.
Thank you for allowing me to be me. That is why you are one of my favorites.
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You're an awesome person and a prolific poet with traits of greatness. Your writing is profound and beautiful.
Neither of us has the right to censor someone from stating their viewpoint...and honestly...I can't say this without being dirty...the idea of my cock and acari27's tits is very appealing to me...but that doesn't matter.
The cock is a metaphor...the tits are a metaphor.
She's talking about our gall, our courage. Not our genetalia.
I'm a bit stumped that you can't see that.
I'm not disappointed. But I might say I was to make a point.
It isn't dirty at all.
It's empowering.
It's a great compliment.
If you can't see that even now...I don't think there's anything else I can say to explain it.
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And make Dr. Frankfurter envious as hell.
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hehe
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Pleasure to read!
this is a very good poem, i can feel the emotions.
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Thanks for reading and commenting. I could have posted, I think, a dozen or more poems in this contest.
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that's a cool poem. my pleasure to read.
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Thanks for reading and commenting.
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