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Prince William Sound

Bitter sea? No, charming sea
Calm with gentle waters
As restless as the storm in me
Don't care for passing bothers
Meets the shore in whispered touch
Holds silky, salty churnings
And shimmers so to blind me much
In sunshine with my yearnings
Anxious salmon jumping high
The joyous seagulls dancing
Avoid the poles and reach the sky
Their love for life enhancing
Maybe I'll take a boat or two
To see this Sound begin anew.

Author notes

My first sonnet ever about the Prince William Sound ocean in Valdez, Alaska. A Shakespearean sonnet, for which writing requirements are 14 lines, ABABCDCDEFEFGG rhyme scheme. So tell me...how did I do?
Written for AP's Next Top Poet, Round Two

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  • kyuuketsuki ai
    August 13, 2008

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    woo! nice. Love how you portrayed the subject matter, and definitely a none-too-shabby sonnet. Great, Hannah!


  • Foxydaze14
    August 11, 2008
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    Good work! Another perfect 55! You're moving on


  • Dlvvanzor
    August 8, 2008

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    Sis, the technical aspect is way over my head, but just reading it I could feel the flow and rhyme. None of the rhymes felt forced, and as usual you paint a remarkable picture.

    Good luck!

    Love,
    -Dlvvanzor


    • Celticjedi
      August 9, 2008
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      Aww sis, you're always so kind to me. Thank you. Yeah, this is the first sonnet I've ever written and I plan to write more. Hopefully I don't blow those. Glad you like it, love ya!