The magician pulls a rabbit from hat,
smiles and bright eyes on the children’s faces.
The lion tamer controls the big wild cat,
oohs and awes are heard in all his paces,
as the magic moment fades in traces.
The big tent now roars with such pure delight,
we are lost in the circus here tonight.
A contest entry
- Poetic Form: Rhyme Royal - Prompt - Dreams by Little Eagle.
700 points, ended August 23, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Thank you for your entry
Good job, not that is a dream if ever there was one. I don't think I have ever been to a circus before. lol
The form was well done with one little slip on the syllable count in your third line and your first line is a little ackward due to leaving out a word for sake of the syllable count. But all in all good structure. Nice rhyme and you kept to the rhyme scheme.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy -
Nicely done in this form. I think I like it. Well done poem, you can feel the excitement. Best of luck...Scott
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Wonderful~
Beauty of a piece penned and tight rhyme~
You brought forth the Mystical sights-
one can see at the Circus-
Inspires a visit...
Excellent!!
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Wonderfully Refreshing!!!
Good luck in the contest!!!
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