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The Inspiration

Like a child cries in the night,
My cry reached out to you
and you cradled me in your arms...

Words slipping from your lips to mine
Sharing dreams of little feet
running down the hall...

Oceans breathe of love written
on the sigh of a dove's feather...

Looking into the horizon
whispers drift along the breeze,
causing my hand to move
across the page of words
that flow from painting fingers...

Dancing in a rhythm of lyrics
Shadowing the moon's laughter
as we interlock fingers of love
and inspiration that twirl through
the fog of miles that separate
Beating hearts...

Singing songs of Angel's
touch and masculine beauty
as your dreams become mine on this
page that your voice inspired...

Hear the music play by the bon fire of life

as lungs reach out and breathe in the voice's

mist that appears beside the fiddle's string,

Reaching out and weaving magic like a gypsy's

mythical ball.. Flowing into the night of a wolf's howl

movement creates paintings of what our minds see in

the rain of your eyes...

Transfering images of life from your heart to mine through

the rhythm of the sun's rays...

 

My muse is the secret key that will open

the door of my mind..

Author notes

Having recently meant a real-life inspiration, I was taken aback by the effect upon my life afterwards. For it was only then in their absence, that I could take stock of the full effect of their inspiration upon me.

I find myself once more lacking, desiring to have more time with them. To be able to sit and to drink in of all they have to offer, with how they speak to my spirit.

So now I ask you, is there anyone such person in your life? If so, please tell me about them and how they inspire you. You may be as abstract and mysterious in your words. Or you may speak openly and candidly as you feel led.

I hope to find some solace in your words, some strength that I can lay hold of.
Niaish (thank you) for your consideration and/or participation.

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  • HaileeDear
    June 2
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    Your imagery here is amazing.


  • poppa
    September 10, 2008

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    Congrats on your silver, I think it was thoroughly deserved. we all have that someone or something that inspires us to strive further, and you words flow with a love that emanates throughout the poem... great stuff


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    September 8, 2008

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    Absolutely brilliant,,,,simple, no explanation needed. The words just sing off the page, Magic piece of thought, well done on the Trophy too.

  • PureCountry
    September 4, 2008

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    I Do So Love

    this offering. Your words are powerful and rich in texture. I feel as if I have found a rare jewel here in the mines of Ap.

    Best of Luck

    Niaish

    Silent Hawk


  • Folklor
    September 3, 2008

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    umm ok here we go off the cuff!

    A-Muse-ment

    What would I do without her?
    the lass that makes me feel
    like burnished gold
    where deep within my heart
    which beats against its cage of steel
    and finally I have found at last
    a love completely real

    A love that only lives betwixed
    a veil of slithered trees
    where brandy coloured leaves caressed
    now sail upon high seas
    written bold upon its leather chest
    for every one to read
    you are my muse my love my friend
    and with me I'll let you lead.

  • Folklor
    September 3, 2008
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    WOW SO CHUFFED HERE THE POEM IS ABOUT ME!
    LA LA LA LALALAL LA LAH!!!!
    WOOOOOOHOOOOOOOOO
    I FEEL GOOD NE NE NE NE NE NE I KNEW THAT I WOULD DAH NE NE NE NE NE NE NE SO GOOD DAH DAH SO GOOD DAH DAH i GOT YOU! DAH DAH DAH DAHHHHHH!

    i would enter naturally but it would seem unfair ifi dd ill just spectate and write you one here in the comments box for fun seeing as the muse is te JUDGE!


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    August 19, 2008

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    WOW!! SIssy this is absolutely amazing.. this blew me away.. its amazing how someone can inspire a person huh? this is an exceptional write.

    awesome job on this poem sissy

    good luck in the contest

    kat


  • Kazytc
    August 13, 2008

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    Wow totally sensational Sis!

    Wow this is just one phenomenal write, love the fabulous terminology with phrases like:
    "as we interlock fingers of love"
    "that flow from painting fingers..."
    "Transfering images of life from your heart to mine through the rhythm of the sun's rays..."
    "My muse is the secret key that will open the door of my mind.."

    This is pure poetry in motion, fabulous poetic graphics ans sculpting to a poetic fine art. You are amazing, this is poet laureate standard and beyond. People should be queueing up at the bookstores for poems like these.
    Fabulous work, well done, love it! Bravo!
    Poetic Hugs,
    Kaz.
    Kazytc xx

  • Ulimate
    August 11, 2008
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    Well done... you touched the essence of what it means to be in love.


    • Angelflower
      August 11, 2008
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      Thank you very much.. I'm glad that you liked it.. Well I'm guessing that you liked it Lol.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    August 10, 2008

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    What a beautiful piece, so rich with metaphor and elegant diction dear, I love your heart, and your soul. *sigh*


    All the best in the contest,
    With much love,
    mj.


  • Draven Alcanis
    August 10, 2008

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    Inspiration comes and goes, and with it the dreams that make them flow. I have met people who have given rise to new hopes and desires of dreams to be fulfilled, and yet...I have been sidelined by events or choices I had to make or that they made. I know what you mean, but true inspiration comes first from within, else you might never find it outside of yourself, either in another person, place, or something as precious and fragile as a dream.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    August 9, 2008

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    Excellent Works!

    A wonderfully expressed piece here you have inscribed!
    Thanks for sharing your talent here.
    All the best within this contest as well!!!

    -Timothy


  • Dark Otter
    August 9, 2008

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    Bandits United! Hoodwinked!

    Its good to see where you are going with your skills. I don't believe how fast you have grown on this site. Congratulations, on your fast evolution into a poetess.

  • myagirl
    August 9, 2008

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    A beautiful poem. I enjoyed reading it.
    Dancing in a rhythm of lyrics
    Shadowing the moon's laughter
    as we interlock fingers of love
    and inspiration that twirl through
    the fog of miles that separate
    Beating hearts...

    That was my favourite piece


  • Riamh
    August 9, 2008

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    sweet,
    I'm glad you found your inspiration, because this poem was truly both inspired and inspirational.

    Singing songs of Angel's
    touch and masculine beauty
    as your dreams become mine on this
    page that your voice inspired...

    I loved all of this poem, but these lines are breathtakingly beautiful.

    My muse is the secret key that will open
    the door of my mind..

    Your muse has certainly revisited.

    *hugs*

    Slayer


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    August 9, 2008

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    this s such a beautiful and airy light write that is truly deep and captivating. i love the way it made me smile and i love it well done


  • Age of Rain
    August 9, 2008

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    So very beautiful. This was airy and light while capturing the depth of the picture. I loved this, it was absolutely amazing. I think this is one of my favorites by you.


    • Angelflower
      August 9, 2008
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      Really?! well, thats great! lol.. I'm gald that you like it


  • notorious gold member
    August 8, 2008

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    I think it's groovy that you BEGIN the poem with a simile w/o anything preceding it...neato.

    Also...you use (I've mentioned this before ) .. instead of ..., the true & proper ellipsis.

    Plus, in many instances, you capitalized the beginning of lies when it was unnecessary to...oh well.

    "doves feather"==>dove's feather
    POSSESSIVE FORMS!!! POSSESSIVE FORMS!!!

    "moons laughter"==>moon's laughter
    Possessive forms...do I have to start crying now? LoL

    "Singing songs of Angel's"==>Angels
    This isn't a possessive form. I assume you're talking about more than one singular angel...I might be wrong...but if you meant plural angels like I think you do, it should be 'Angels'.

    "fiddles string"==>fiddle's string, or fiddles' string if you mean more than 1 fiddle.

    "gypsy's mythical ball"
    Did you just use...a possessive form correctly?
    I'm just getting on your case...LoL.

    There were parts I did like, I just had to point out all the errors first.

    "Sharing dreams of little feet/running down the hall..."
    I hate kids younger than me, but good lines here.

    "on the sigh of a dove's feather"
    Makes me think of Gypsy-Princess's style...which is good.

    "that flow from painting fingers"
    I LOVE THAT. It could be talking about poetry perhaps, painting a picture with words.
    Or something...

    "in a rhythm of lyrics"
    Groovy, but could be even groovier (well, in my opinion, maybe not yours ) if it was "in lyrical rhythm" or "lyrics' rhythm"...
    Maybe. Maybe not.

    "My muse,"<--you didn't need a comma here, in my opinion...

    Good luck...

    Did you even read all of this?




  • ears2hearyou gold member
    August 8, 2008

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    this was truly written so lovely and luscious

    we could feel each line tenderly revealed.
    Very beautiful and touching to the soul!
    well done poetess, truly well done!
    ears/Seattle


  • Swangrnv gold member
    August 8, 2008
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    well done

    sweet friend this is lovely, and very inspiring itself. lots of luck in the contest to you.


  • Puppydog gold member
    August 8, 2008

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    VERY LOVELY AND OH SO SWEET!!!!

    We do find our inspiration in many people we meet. I do have some of my own who reach out and touch me just when I need someone to.

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