Morning breath
created condensation
on my skin-
that was bare
and bronzing in sunrise,
lacking cotton sheets.
You were fashioning duvets
in morning glory.
I was coasting
around coffee cups,
watching flashing lights
belonging to switches
on kettles-
Collecting bags
from under eyes,
that longed for far more
ticks and tocks
in bed.
The smell of green tea
always untangled you
from quilts,
left a pinch upon my waist,
and sketches of recollections
on my kitchen wall.
Author notes
For Teen Idol 9 Round 7.
counter-clockwise confusion
kodak kaleidoscope
tessellation skin
The morning after
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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You have an amazing sense of how words will sound if put together, even if they are strange words..
it made me think and picture the scene you were telling. I enjoyed it very much.
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"Collecting bags
from under eyes,
that longed for far more
ticks and tocks
in bed."
Beautiful.
I love how all the things you used in here and all the subjects were very soft and calm and sort of contry-ish, (to me anyways.)
It just painted a picture of a quiet morning with light pastel colors and stuff.
I wish my writing was as good as this. >.>
"The smell of green tea
always untangled you
from quilts,
left a pinch upon my waist,
and sketches of recollections
on my kitchen wall."
Beautiful. <3 -
"Collecting bags
from under eyes,
that longed for far more
ticks and tocks
in bed."
Ah-may-zing
Truly!!!
Aww I love it!
Good luck in the contest
Shelly
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