he's under my skin
I can't get rid of him
bound by a child
no longer bound by love
his bright warm eyes
that once saw me beautiful
now empty and dark
unfeeling
he's under my skin
tell me how to send him
to the dark place he threw me
I scratch
I tear
I bleed
but he doesn't care
he's under my skin
all he does is laugh and stare
Author notes
Alexz Johnson - Skin (from her tv series Instant Star)
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Comments
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ha don't I know this one all too well.
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Very nice! Before I even got to the part where you said it was Alexz Johnson, I knew it was her song lyrics that you used in your title and piece! Fantastick write. I like the poem you wrote of off the song.
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thanks for the entry! Please keep on writing!
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always try to enter your contest. i do love them!!! i will do my best to keep up with the writing. hope you enjoy whatever i bring to the table...lol!
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wow that was pretty good keep writing....!!!!!!!
luv,lily
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thanks for the entry! Please keep on writing!
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eek... That ending was profound and a little freaky. Sucks when they have any kind of power over you. especially if you have already once been broken.
Well done and congrats on the shiney.
Delila
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don't worry, the ending is just a metaphor ;0) but yeah, it really sucks to the max when you fall in love with someone and it seems like you are totally in their control and will do anything and everything to please them. i really hate it when that happens! but i'm in a better situation now, so no worries there!!! looking on the bright side --- all my broken pieces have been slowly getting put back together. thanks again for comments!
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I read your poem cuz I dig your name :P
My, my!
I hope this is not about yourself... That would suck... Quite a angry poem. Spiteful in a way. "Hes under my skin" is such a powerful potent metaphor... Brilliant concept.
Anyways,
Great stuff
Keep Writing
Ditt0
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Wow..this is a GREAT write! Great flow, full of emotion.
"Tell me how to send him to the dark place he threw me" Love it.
Really, really good job!
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That's a terrible feeling to have
inside of you. I love the imagery
and thought that you put into this.
Well done and congratulations to you
on your trophy here! Keep it up!
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OMG this is really amazing!!! i love the flow, I kinda know how you feel. wow this is AMAZING
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bound by a child
loving the poem its great -
Magnificent write. You can feel the hate you have for this person. I am really in love with Alexz Johnsons work for her show... Great job
Rose
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thanks
well, i really loved this guy but then things just went from bad to worse and i found a better guy anyway... also have you seen Alexz Johnson in a tv series called "so weird"? it was a disney channel series that only lasted 3 seasons and Alexz was in the last season. She sang a few songs on the show. her name on the show was Annie. anyways thanks again for the comment. -
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no i didnt..
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