Tossing and turning
in the middle of the night.
Maybe my pillows just aren't
positioned right.
seems asthough they have
a life of they're own.
Animated and fluffy
like cottoncandy cones.
God I wish she was here.
a little sex would be
a nice repair.
Tick tock, tick tock
goes the clock in my head.
It sucks when you wake up
and can't go back to bed.
A thousand thoughts crowding
inside my brain.
shut up!
shut up!
Please god! this is insane.
The clock strikes six and
its time to go to work.
Wouldn't you know it
now I fall to sleep like a jerk.
A contest entry
- Insomnia by LaylaLace.
1000 points, ended September 3, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This one made me laugh! You explained it all very well.
Good luck in the contest!
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I know this feeling...so well! And then it's not like you get a chance to finally be sleepy...I love the shut up shut up part.
Very well told, a touch of sardonic reality to go with my coffee.
Excellent.
Best wishes,
Jin
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HAHAHA!!
this is halarouse lolz i love it ive been like that teh past few nights 2 lolz i dont want 2 have sex with this sertin someone i like but i would like them to be here with me right now lolz this is awsome how i can relate 2 this!! darell this just made my day lolz thanks!!
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I love it!
the flow is wonderful. Good luck in the contest.
What a night, huh?
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smiles...been there, done that *shows the T-shirt*
A great write! -
Oh. This is a cute little poem that you have penned in here.
It made me think of all those times I've had insomnia and just couldn't get back to sleep. I'd just get so frustrated because I knew I was going to be tired the next morning and there wasn't much I could do about it. I thought you did a good job of expressing yourself here.
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ha ha that was fun to read!
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Right on!
Other than being a wonderful poem...you tell a nice little story.
I can relate to this.
Great job my friend!
wolf
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a good piece of poetry which flows smoothly along.
seems asthough their taking - this line needs a little editing - asthough a break needed and their taking, they are or they're. ha yeah when the word work enters the brain then that is the best way to solve insomnia
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