reaching out, a rose touched me
with urgent, gentle perforation
skin wept; nary of sting
but more in too long wanting
eyeing the stem
I envied its strength
to the merit of every leaf
outstretched they lay
poised in perfection
to surrender their bounties beneath
most rousing arose
a red petal diadem
with a bouquet cherished o’er a last breath
more malleable than wine
could trace upon lip
nor linger temptation to tongue
curved more in expression
than mere hope might allow
drawing thoughts of transgression through air
thus I danced for my rose
and the chance to compose
something broader and beyond by own wit
Author notes
When I first came to AP the new members contest theme was "out of the box". I wrote a simple poem called Jack and received a great deal of encouagement from many of the greeters I still see listed. As I had joined AP on the last day of the month I now had 30 days to wait in which, to my demise, I wrote five more poems for the contest and then had a very hard time deciding which one to go with. Lol.
I have made more than a few friends here at AP but one, above all, has blossomed into a great friendship which I hope shall continue to endure.
Once in while this person seems a wee bit withdrawn and on those days, sometimes, but a single red rose is left and that, as in this case, is inspiration enough.
She is the greeter hosting this contest and though her name stands absent, I've penned this for her.
Happy Birthday, Kristy!
In a list
A contest entry
- Greeter Team [contest] by LionessK.
1300 points, ended September 8, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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as I think I have said before this is a wonderful poem for a most wonderful greeter and a great friend to both of us and to many here on the site,
thanks for entering this in the contest.
cheers
Grey
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The rose can be a very cliche poetic topic but you have expanded its scope and appeal. The only stanza that made me wonder was:
most rousing arose
a red petal diadem
with a bouquet cherished o’er a last breath
It is clear that the rose symbolizes someone special and this adds to the feeling of the poem. -
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thanks, that's very kind
I appreciate your thoughts.
I couldn't resist the word play and aliteration in the first two of these lines. For myself, they are my favorite as they also mark the turning point.
I admit the final line there is a bit clumsy but I felt, meaning wise, it suffered when shortened and I think meter in this format can be easy adjusted by inflection.
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Perfection
Absolutely beautiful.
wolf
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you're being far too kind, thanks so much, :D Kj
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That was a beautiful read, thank you.
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i dont know what half the words mean but my aunt said thatit was beautiful
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I'll take that... tell your auntie thanks from me and you... are WAY TOO CUTE!!!
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o.o
just kidding...
I was going to wait towards the end of the contest to comment on the entries... but of course I had to say something here.
All I can seem to come up with at the moment is thank you. This is just ...(dghkjfklcgds) beautiful. and once again you have brought me a rainbow when I needed one. You are a wondrous friend. Thank you and thank you again
and they are not as pretty as yours but...
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no, thank you
the single will always be enough... it's always meant the world to me
it makes me do this
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