fireflies
now and then
the memories
A contest entry
- Haiku and Bless You! by azure85.
4500 points, ended August 22, 2008, 57 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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fireflies
now and then
the memories
Hi bb - I really like the connotations in this, flickerings of memories - not tooooo sure about the '..ies' ending of line 1 & line 3 - would it damage your intent if the last line was just 'a memory'?
Whatever .... good stuff
Alan
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Thanks for commenting, Alan. What i meant was not just "a memory", but many memories,coming and going, popping in and out of mind;so...
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fireflies
now and then
the memories
Very beautiful, a delightful glimpse of a summer night, and delight of fireflies and memory. Thank you so much.
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Lovely. Now and then like the blinking of fireflies, then seeing the fireflies and remembering other days... they come and go.
marlene
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