A fetid rotten stench,
Choking the air from life,
Crippled fingers of hope,
Grapple pathetically...
Hands of apathy hold strong,
Strengthened on sorrowful ignorance.
Suffocating in a blanket of conformity,
Despair taken somewhere deeper,
Waters of denial rise around me,
Another evil testing my strength of conviction...
My tunnel is the light,
There is dark at its end...
I embrace its blacken...
It will be my saviour.........
I WILL not be taken down,
I will forever,stand strong...
Author notes
Sorry there is no real style here but it just came out this way, I have been waiting for my muse on this contest, see what you think matey!!!
It is about humans and there blissful ignorance towards our killing the planet.
A contest entry
- Invite Only... by mysticstorm.
475 points, ended August 10, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I thought this was a great expression of your thoughts and feelings.
We need to take care of the beauty of our planet that was given to us.
debbie
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Just my kind of write...we are so very sad in our behavor and act as if it is the way it is meant to be...we do not own it, we live here on borrowed time and are so stupid at the ignorance we share...
Beautifully done...
you wrote it deep and with great metaphor and maening...
Thank you my friend...
Best,
mystic -
Great determination, beautiful poem.
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Oh. This is a sad little poem that you have going on here. I read your author notes though and I could see where you were coming from. I may not have known that it was talking about humans and how we treat the planet but I did pick up the despair and unhappiness. I thought you did a good job of expressing yourself here.
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Indeed powerful
Well written with a strong clear message.
I really enjoyed this and am in total agreement.
well done!
wolf
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excellent~
For no real style you have penned an excellent poem
The imagery is awesome...
Could almost smell the rotten fetid stench and see the crippling fingers and feel the despair....
Excellent and best of luck in the contest....
I have up a new one hope you drop by
Hugs
Susan~~~
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