I’ll carve your name into my arm
Don’t just stand there look alarmed
Can’t you see that’s life’s a breeze
You are just simply my disease
All your nightmares coming true
I am not so weak, what will you do?
Your tears are now my new tattoo
Imbedded deeply, though askew
I can no longer be your knight
I’ll just sit back and watch you fight
Incomes the foreboding night
Can you begin to see the light?
Can’t you see that life’s a breeze
And that you’re simply my disease
I never wanted you to start with
And my love was just a myth
Never trust what you can’t see
Because your own heart’s been deceived
Though your pleas bring me great glee
I’m sorry I can’t be the key
I’m not what I said I am
Like Iago I’m just a sham
Using those who’ll be convinced
That I’m a man and not a prince
Our love darling did not exist
If anything was time unmissed
I’m glad to be out of that trap
Though not regretted was the tap
Sure you may call me a sleaze
And looking back you’re just a tease
Though I didn’t think you’d mind
I came up with this little rhyme
Darling I’m glad to have escaped
Since last August you’ve put on weight
Yes I’ll say the sex wasn’t great
Hopefully you’re filled with hate
I don’t want more messages on my machine
Forget my number, it’s obscene
Incomes the foreboding night
Don’t forget to go into the light
Please tell me what you think
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Pretty Good!
"Never trust what you can’t see
Because your own heart’s been deceived
Though your pleas bring me great glee
I’m sorry I can’t be the key"
That is my favorite verse from this poem!Your rhyme scheme was actally pretty good accept for, "Though I didn’t think you’d mind
I came up with this little rhyme" That feels really forced but thats the only bad thing about this poem!
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Wow interesting piece....
speaks the truth of your heart great job. -
It is imaginative piece sharing the emotions through the piece of the poetic reactions..I love it..well done...
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I like the meaning behind this,
I'm not too sure about the rhyme scheme though, it makes the poem too face paced and should be said slower, especially cos its someone tellin their ex lover to get lost, it should be slow and deliberate. Not quick.
But other than that its really good well done. -
WHA IS THIS????
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