Then, as she glanced behind her, she realized that she simultaneously had gained and lost the greatest thing in her life, by making the choice to leave Ronald McDonald once and for all.
A contest entry
- Sentence by crivanea.
300 points, ended August 21, 2008, 32 entries
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Short and sweet, I like this. I hope you do well in the contest. If you're ever gonna put this somewhere where people can only see the title, I would recommend making it something to grab the reader. Although, Well.... kind of grabbed me because I am a curious person. I'm not sure that everyone is curious as I am though, so I'd consider that
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i like it
great poem -
sweeeeeeeeeet!!!!!!!!!!
i love this poem its so freaking awsome great write and great concept good job bob
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lol.!!! i love it..sounds like the movie..the mcdonald movie..lol..good job..good choice..not sure about the lost..but i agree w/ the gain...but nice word choice!.,.gained her freedom..and lost her weight.lol
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Well at least she's not with the creepy guy with the red hair which always lets you sit right on his lap and keeps on smiling
I think Ronald McDonald is creepy
Very unique write
Good luck with your entry!
Claire x
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COOL
YOU LIKE WRITING STORY'S I HAVE A SITE FOR YOU STORYWRITE.COM AND YOU AND WRITE SOME STORYS AND PEOPLE CAN READ IT JUST LIKE TRY IT YOU WOULD LOVE IT I HAVE SOME STORY STUCK ON IT JUST ONE BUT YOU WILL LOVE THE SITE AND CAN SOME ONE LEAV MCDONALD GUY HE MAKES MILLION POOR HIM CAUSE SHE LEAVING HIM SHE COULD HAVE BEEN A RICH PERSON
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aww wow poor her
this is really funny, great write and good luck
take care, Stephanie ♥
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