Blissless kisses and joker’s smiles revile
in psychedelic effigy,
effortless sleeps with butterflies,
flitting like some rainbow veil,
all hail to such enigmatic euphoria,
Such people do we seem to attract,
a pact between such lovers,
others don’t take the time to notice the rain,
again it pours once more,
such sleeps with butterflies, the lies,
lock you up with truth the only key, could be,
the end,
Systematic run-down places, forgotten faces,
blurred into empty shells,
banished to hell’s lair,
with flair, and such disposition,
a transition so coarse, the force,
of a beaten-down society, no propriety
for anything anymore, proficiency pending,
such torture never ending,
Author notes
X-Queen-Georgia-X
this poem does rhyme but it's casual
In a list
A contest entry
- Prewrite-palooza by swim.x.
1650 points, ended October 6, 2008, 100 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Reason Why =) by incondite.
700 points, ended September 24, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - MAKE ME FEEL by Cena-of-Destiny.
2750 points, ended October 17, 2008, 45 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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And nice casual rhyme it is
Great poem. Loved the internal rhyme. It's got character!
Congratulations,
Good luck in the contest.
Chin up,
Swim.x
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wow.
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I love this. It's easy -and fun- to read and I feel like I could read it again and again and not get bored with it...Definitely one of my favorites...I'm gonna have to come back to this again =D
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This is great I see you kicked your muses behind to get it in gear thans for sharing this much love always
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oh wow!
The use of words here just blew me away! your metaphores were beautiful and your imagery was powerful! its a lovely write, keep penning!
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Gotta tell you Georgia, I'm loving your muse atm. This is some superb writing, bedazzling in it's splendour.
Excellent linguistic skills and form, marvellous context...
Bravo
'D'
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aww honey this is so amazing,
your imagery is just spectacular
your wording is just lovely, your new muse is amazing,
all my love,
kitty xxx
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