Heaven opens its arms and sends
Angelic drops to bless our souls
And refresh our puzzled minds
Angels dance on canvas clouds
And watch those who run and hide
Hoping their hearts would just open up
To the joy raindrops could bring
Crystal droplets sit silently
On the flamboyant red roses’ petals
Creating a picture perfect moment
And at one isolated part of this world
Where ripples chase away threatening grey clouds
And let the radiant sun warm our gratified souls
A girl, blessed with beauty and a big heart
Dances free to the synchronizing melody
Of crashing waves and her heartbeat
- I Truly Love The Rain group list • next in list
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt by Jasmine Rayne.
900 points, ended August 17, 2008, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Shine a light in the Darkness by Rhythm Child.
550 points, ended November 18, 2008, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Awsome!
well done! love the first stanza! (and the rest obv
) great write!
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enchantng
this was aenchating scenario that you paint...and i loved it from the first line to teh last line Dancing in teh rain ca be so much fun. I wasdancing myself...withut rain. Thanks for sharing -
I like it! Great job. And it's kinda even better cause it's raining like crazy outside tight now.
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I dont really know what to say about this poem as everything has pretty much all been said.. but this poem really moved me.. its amazing and im not surprised you won!
You deffo deserved it!
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this is amazing!great use of imagry and words
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I like the way you described.I like rain in summer days.Dancing in the rain would be something perfect nearly magic
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I enjoyed this.
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Oooooo. This is a really great one! I love the imagery in this piece. And your choice of words just make certain lines pop. I really can't pinpoint a favorite part, this is just a lovely lovely piece. Makes me wanna smile
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Always a treat to read your wokr sweetie
Rain is a wonderful topic to dance to And read -
wow this is so amazing.
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Awesome!
Im actually speechless!
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Yay!
It won, it won! It won the GOLD!!!!! Wow, I knew it was a gold winner!
So Beautiful Beauty, just like you!
Loves,
Auntie -
Brilliant!
the enthralling majesty of rain
painted on a canvas of sheer beauty.
An enchanting poem that rekindles
my personal fascination with rain.
I think its one of the most romantic
events of nature. You did a lovely job
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This is ansome write. I can't see why people don't love the rain.
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absolutely gorgeous... wow
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"Heaven opens its arms and sends
Angelic drops to bless our souls
And refresh our puzzled minds
Angels dance on canvas clouds " those are my favorite verses, I love this descript comparin it to angels, beauty beyond
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This is a really beautiful poem. Lovely job hun
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I loved it
message me
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This is beautiful!
Now, this is definitively not one of the ones that doesn't make sense!!! ha ha.........It's so perfect! And you must be the beautiful girl that's dancing in the rain! Stunning write!
Gold poem............love it so much!
Castaway
"group hug!"
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Stunning
Visually elegant and softly crafted
Well done on all your trophies
Best wishes Julie
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amsome poem i love it i love dancing in the rain and thank u for the comment as well
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Amazing...
I love love love this poem... it's so happy... and reminds me how much god loves us to bless us with so many little this... and even bigger things such as the rain... I love it... Its beautiful... Amazingly writen... Keep up the good work my friend.... Haven't stoped smiling!
-Never Known.
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Touching
When I read this peice it reminded me of a saying a friend told me and every time it rains I sing it to the heavens "God is washing our sins away"
Touching and Thought provoking poem.I really enjoyed reading this, reminds us of nature and it effects it has on our soul..
Thank you for sharing -
the poem makes the rain more beautiful...
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DEAR BEAUTY OF SILENCE
YOUR POEMS ARE VERY GOOD
LOVE
WILFRED JOH
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Awesome Poet You Are LOL
A girl, blessed with beauty and a big heart
Dances free to the synchronizing melody
Of crashing waves and her heartbeat
Beautiful, Write more please...
Walks up Beauty threatning , if she doesn't write more poetry, or ask Ap to add 7 extra applauses, and make her a mod.
Beauty: You've nailed it!
I wish there were more then 3 applause!!!
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Thanks for your entry. Good luck in the contest
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This is a beautifully written poem, that paints a picture in the mind taking the reader, into the rain dancing.
Simply beautiful
~sugar~
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I think that this is beyond beautiful congratulations on your trophy wins for this piece best wishes always be well
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This is beautiful, the word play was exceptional, These lines "Crystal droplets sit silently
On the flamboyant red roses’ petals
Creating a picture perfect moment" were my favorite, they held the body of the poem so well. A moment frozen in time. Thankyou for entering my contest, and Good Luck! -
wow
fantastic imagery,simply beautifull write!!
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I loved the last two stanzas,Compared to these two stanzas the rest of the poem is just ok for me,but still really nice work,It's just the ending stanzas are so great they make everything else look mediocre.
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This poem is filled with lovely imagery. A truly wonderful read. Congratulations on the awards won. Well deserved.
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There's quite some good imagery in this poem, and I surely love the touch of alliteration here and there.
Thank you for this entry!
Leander -
beautiful!!
oh my goodness this was such a beautiful poem! your ability to make the words come to life is incredible! it felt like i was being taken away to the enchanted world you imagined! i wish i could give you more than just three applauses!
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Utterly divine. There is no other word for this!
Your words are soft and stirring like sweet golden honey, they are dazzling and enchanting. I feel as if I am right there experiencing it all! Wow. Folks, this is one amazingly talented poet right here! Wow. This truly blows me away. As perfect as it can get. Well done to you! Keep penning your masterpieces x
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Very nice! i loved it.
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Amazing
This is amazing! ohhmygosh, I love it.
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thankyou very much this is what i want
i do not beleive in luck but i beleive in talent and it is a quality that all can have and what will win this contest
message me for anything
Billy (Rhythm Child) -
This a really cozy, warm healing sort of poem i really enjoyed reading it!
very deservant of your gold trophy well done!
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Warm
I really like this poem, It is warm and I enjoyed reading it. Keep up the writing.
"A girl, blessed with beauty and a big heart
Dances free to the synchronizing melody
Of crashing waves and her heartbeat"
This here makes me feel free at the thought, the whole idea of that poem seems to be warm and free. Hopefully that makes sense, though Im not good at commenting I try me best XD Have a great day/night. -
AN EXCELLENT POEM 25 MARKS
Heaven opens its arms and sends
Angelic drops to bless our souls
And refresh our puzzled minds
Angels dance on canvas clouds
And watch those who run and hide
Hoping their hearts would just open up
To the joy raindrops could bring
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Awesome write. the last bit reminded me of my girlfriend who loves the rain. And:
"Crystal droplets sit silently
On the flamboyant red roses’ petals
Creating a picture perfect moment"
that part was just perfect. great imagery
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I loved it. It was beautiful!
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This is beautiful. Loved every word of it.. Keep writing
~lae
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Very good, you paint a good picture with your words, and i tell you thats getting more and more uncommen. Great job.
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Great imagery with deep meanings makes this poem worth the read. I was grabbed into the poem since it was that good and well written! Beautiful work of art! Keep it up!
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I like this very much.
You are very talented for being so young.
keep it up and take it easy.
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This is a very pretty poem indeed your imagry is superb it is very delicate it has many layers like a beautifully wrapped very special christmas tree ornament i really like this very much, thanks for sharingand allowing me to comment on your lovely work take care littlefishone
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Refreshing to my Spirit
I just love the feeling its gives me while Im reading refreshing my spirit,and soul.
"Angels dance on canvas clouds
And watch those who run and hide
Hoping their hearts would just open up
To the joy raindrops could bring"
Captures my being your words flow with such grace
"A girl, blessed with beauty and a big heart
Dances free to the synchronizing melody
Of crashing waves and her heartbeat"
Feel like dancing in the rain
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This is beautiful.
So peaceful and with great flow and amazing imagery.
I really love this, great work
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Look, everyone here says you're amazing. I say you are PERFECT. Dear God this IS perfectly perfect. I love the idea of "dancing in the rain" and how you described it. Great job dear sis, great job.
Keep writing
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superb richness
your words are very beautifully written with wonderful imagery and fabulous flowing lines, i enjoyed reading this so very much,,,blessings of love,light,life,and laughter..Firestorm
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Easy to see why this won gold already!@ A sheer delight to read! Thanks for entering and best wishes,
Frogz~ -
I loved how this started
"Heaven opens its arms and sends
Angelic drops to bless our souls
And refresh our puzzled minds"
Thanks for joining in.
Love and Light
Frozentearz -
This poem is amazing! I loved it. Every line and every stanza was more beautiful than the last. Truly wonderful.
"Angels dance on canvas clouds"
I love the word choice here. The subtle alliteration is great! Loved this line- was my favourite one. :]
"Crystal droplets sit silently
On the flamboyant red roses’ petals
Creating a picture perfect moment"
Absolutely gorgeous. Reminds me of dew-kissed flowers in the early morning. :] "Picture-perfect" should be hyphenated if it's going to be one adjective for "moment", though.
"Where ripples chase away threatening grey clouds
And let the radiant sun warm our gratified souls"
This was absolutely gorgeous. "Ripples chase away threatening grey clouds". Left me awestruck. I feel warmed when I read about the "radiant sun". Lovely.
"Dances free to the synchronizing melody
Of crashing waves and her heartbeat"
Wonderful, superb ending. This piece was quite beautiful. I loved the word choice and the overall flow. Fantastic write and thank you for entering. :]
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Hi Ranji - again this is tender and beautiful writing. This style of composition obviously works well for you as your word choice and flow seem so natural and unforced. There are a couple of areas though that you should place under the microscope.
i) St3,L2 clunks around the possessive when read aloud and is better thus: on flamboyant petals of red roses – there are alternative paths too!
ii) try to find alternatives to using 'the' when you can - look to substitute a creative adjective (without overdoing it or going cliché
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Angels dance on [the] {snowdome/snowscape/mogul/canvas, etc.} clouds
[The -(you can drop this one entirely)] crystal droplets sit silently
And at one isolated part of this world
Where ripples chase away [the] {steel/slate/coal/death, etc} grey clouds
And let [the] radiant sun warm our {thankful/blossom} souls
A girl, blessed with beauty and a big heart
Dances [to the] {free to} synchronizing melody
Of [the (-drop it!!)] crashing waves and her {singing} heartbeat
I hope my advice can help you develop your work even more.
Love & Peace, Kezz
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Someone loved your poem so much that they entered it into my contest. I can see why they loved it. It is very beautiful, a pure joy to read. Thispiece is so soft and tenderly written. Outstanding writing.
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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wow! ranji you are brilliant...this was such a beautiful beautiful piece. oh my. I loved this. AND it is raining now too I mean this is such a coincidence lol XD
I LOVE THIS. i do i do i do. maaaan you are so good. you know that? ok let's see ... i loved everything. and your words are awesome, the imagery is just stunning i tell ya, and the ending--oh my, the ending was simple so perfect.
I LOVED THIS RANJI!!!!!!!!! you keep writin' gal because you are just getting better
MUCH MUCH MUCH LOVE AND LOADS AND LOADS AND LOADS OF LUCKS,
ME!! (guess who) kk calm down, it's me CHARU!!!!!
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Beautiful, I loved everything about this they title caught my eye straigt away and I am so priveliged to have clicked on such a pretty poem
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as always your use of words is so amazing that as i read this write it seems like the words are gracefully dancing in my mind...
The crystal droplets sit silently
On the flamboyant red roses’ petals
Creating a picture perfect moment
i like this line, i like how you personified the droplets and paired it with roses and resulting a picture perfect moment GOD such genius,,, this is idk i just cant stop reading this line.............
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