Torn apart between an old love
as fresh as the morning dew,
and a present love which staleness
is crumbling its warmth into pieces.
Past first love pain but a lasting flame,
a small fire reignited to burn vividly?
Hidden shy smiles and sweet love memories
tickle my being, and appetite to infidelity
to my present.
my conscience shies away, yet in hesitation
temptation plays on the strings of my heart
to dive back in his old steep oceans
I barely survived and almost drowned in the past.
Am I signing my death certificate this time?
Sadness and bleeding filling anew my heart and soul
I want a divorce with my present
making of my past a base for my future.
Can the past fill the emptiness of the present?
Or am I losing both?
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Thank you and good luck
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Great write, I love the emotion and imagery in this piece!
Flows nicely.
Bravo!!!
♥ kate -
Am I signing my death certificate this time?
Sadness and bleeding filling anew my heart and soul
I want a divorce with my present
making of my past a base for my future.
Can the past fill the emptiness of the present?
Or am I losing both?
Exquisite. Good luck!
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Outstanding
This poem talks about a choice in love, whether to stay with your present lover or move on to new and wxciting horizons. I liked the way you looked at the situation and the vivid and I must say poetic images you have used to describe it. A fantastic poem.
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My dear thank you so much again
yeah, thoughts come and go when the present is unstable and feels so remote.
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you'll know.....
when i made the decision, i knew...there was no doubt
in my soul....it was if i drank a cup of peace,
and come hell or highwater, I was not going to look
back and wonder what i'd done....plus....if you are not
sure...a seperation always reveals the truth.
don't rush...wait for the peace.
seperating either makes the heart willing to compromise,
and set up happy boundaries or it falls apart...
and then you know, you absolutely know you have done
the right thing.
(my ex had me replaced by a cocktail waitress in 4 months!)
I knew! without a doubt.
ears/Seattle
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taking things slowly and trying patience
it seems to me sometimes that my patience wastes precious time, but it could also save us from taking hasty decisions. you are absolutely right
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