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Fraying Crows

The leaves outside my towers

Swirl as the crows give flight

Sending the fever of murder

As they post on posts

Watching and comprehending

Man on man wars

Day by day

While one by one they fray

Praying on lost eaten lives

Calling to the sky for more sinful hate

But these crows are coughing sick

Disease spreading from lung to lung

So they go and go to the human kind

Dropping their dead into dinner plates

 

Watching skies

Things fall and we can't see them

In the mind we'll become ill

Shouting for the doctor

Who can do nothing but stare

These crows are only signs

 

Underneath their feathered hearts

Is a truth of un-loyal color codes

Stained in the sunset

Itching the dirt until it

Unwillingly is disposed

Into a grave of a dead man from the war

These fraying crows, they do decay

 

These fraying crows....They do decay

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  • consternation imply
    August 29, 2008
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    Have you ever heard of sixpence. I made a connection. I like this one.

    • YEP

      SING A SONG OF SIXPENCE A POCKET FULL OF RYE, 4 AND 20 BLACKBIRDS BAKED IN A PIE, WHEN THE PIE WAS OPENED THE BIRDS BEGAN TO SING, WASN'T THAT A DAINTY DISH TO SET BEFORE THE KING, THE KING WAS IN THE COUNTING HOUSE COUNTING OUT HIS MONEY, THE QUEEN WAS IN THE PARLOR EATING BREAD AND HONEY, THE MAID WAS IN THE GARDEN HANGING OUT THE CLOTHES WHEN ALONG CAME A BLACK BIRD AND PECKED OFF HER NOSE.
      I MEMORIZED THAT ONE AT A VERY YOUNG AGE. THANKS


  • ShInE45DoWn
    August 14, 2008
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    this was really good, cube :]


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    August 9, 2008

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    amazing my friend, this whole poem was beautifully done my friend, you did a great job on this, keep it flowing


  • Dorick
    August 8, 2008
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    Great job, the beginning stanza was my favorite.


  • Esgon Rashak
    August 8, 2008
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    wow that is so cool good job cube


  • Darc Fragile Rose
    August 8, 2008

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    ummm

    wow... babe this is... wow i love it!!!! so very much like something i'd think about... great job
    Love,
    Me

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