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teasing lips hidden

teasing lips hidden
behind burgundy curtains
blush in the sunrise.



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  • aanika
    August 19, 2008

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    this seems to have a double meaning;
    both natural and sensual.
    I don't know if I like the title or not,
    it's a bit repetitive to make it the same as the first line,
    especially in such a short poem...
    good luck though !


  • Venugopal gold member
    August 12, 2008
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    nice haiku, subtle hints


  • Frodofan silver member
    August 8, 2008

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    But if they are behind the curtains the sunrise can't be touching them... Hm....

    Asides from that sort of odd point, I like the image. Very sweet.


    • crivanea
      August 8, 2008
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      lol. i was waiting for someone to make that comment. that is why i said "blush" if u ever look at roses carefully, no matter if they r not fully opened, the "lips" inside brighten faintly. thnx u for ocmmenting and for allowing me to clarify


      • Frodofan silver member
        August 9, 2008
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        Ah ha! Deeper meaning. I should have caught on because of the background. Was not thinking of flowers.

  • She Stole My Voice
    August 7, 2008

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    I love the colour burgundy.
    :]
    Thank you for entering and good luck!
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